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armanca
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 211
Tennessee

0 posted 2001-01-30 07:37 AM


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A secret untold
where death is life
and life will never end.
In this netherworld
deep breaths don't calm
instead the feeling of falling
is behind every door you greet
Every face you know
is a stranger behind pale eyes
Zombies walk the street
as if even the dead wants out
Every error, mistake, and maddening experience
thrives within the mirror of the sky
there is no escape here
it is the prison that is made
when a secret goes untold.


~Carman


© Copyright 2001 Carman - All Rights Reserved
mystic requiem
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since 2001-01-26
Posts 144

1 posted 2001-01-30 10:18 AM


Good work!
It speaks quality and depth.
It took one poem to tell me all this.
More please.
*S*


mYsTiC

Ginners
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since 2000-07-22
Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey
2 posted 2001-01-30 01:14 PM


this is a wonderful piece, thank you for sharing it with the members of passions
Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597

3 posted 2001-01-30 11:49 PM


Classic subject, well wrought with embedded fear.  Nice work.
mirror man
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since 2001-01-08
Posts 814

4 posted 2001-01-31 12:13 PM


I agree.  This is very good.
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