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Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

0 posted 2001-01-22 10:30 PM

Shower Of Tears

When night is dark, as is the day
time's flesh etched scars never wash away,
a heart lies closed 'pon the shower floor
I've drowned the key and locked the door,
pools of tears crawl down bare skin
exhaling happiness, taking sorrow in,
alone, shivering in stale abyss
trapped in the memory of horrors reminisce,
bleeding icicles, lost in drenched ache
a bitter soul, does a tragedy make,
flowing water never dulls the pain
of deception and regret, intervals of unending refrain,
life's honey is ever bitter draping body in frozen sleet,
my soul shall never be dry, poured with tears of porcelain defeat,
nothing left to love, nothing left to grasp
caged by walls, a suitcase full of an ugly past,
immersed in life's vacancy, never to digrese,
crucified by tidal waves of distress,
unable to rid my body of this dirty lie
no matter how hard I scrub and cry,
blackened tears fade into the shower's rain
leaving me jaded, far from sane,
unable to cleanse my soul complete
pellets of prayers, unanswered, crash at my feet,
surrounded by the sound of shattered dreams
piercing cold skin with revolving streams,
a body shrivelled, deformed with sores,
forced to dwell in this shell, forevermore,
misty waterfalls extinguish faith's flame
my decay is imminent as I wallow in shame,
destined to lose, swimming against the current, yet, never to win,
mad thoughts overtake, powerless, to calm the beast within,
ears are flooded with this shrilling disease,
hands cradle head, feeble, in the tangled ocean weaved,
losing consciouness in stifling air, feeding unsatisfied stigma,
never to find the way back to myself, deep in the black hole of an enigma,
for, mother mercy knows no reprieve
destroying the heart worn on skin's sleeve,
terrified, confused 'neath this raging sea
enveloped by anguish...oh Lord, why me?
In swirling echoes, hope races down the drain
as I, lie sobbing, awash in pain,
for, time's flesh etched scars never go away
when night is black to bruise the day

*By Melissa Honeybee*

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The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams

[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 01-22-2001).]

ThyWizard
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since 2000-08-06

Posts 56
Chambersburg, PA, USA

1 posted 2001-01-23 08:56 AM

An excellent piece written from the heart and soul. I loved the whole flow of the poem and the word choice was well handled. Very sad though, but smile, there are happier days ahead

" If who i am is what i have and what i have is lost, then who am I? " - unknown

Tryps

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

2 posted 2001-01-23 09:16 AM

Never caught the original version but I like the revision. Especially can relate to the, "my decay is imminent as I wallow in shame" line. Well done.

Michael

Ginners
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since 2000-07-22

Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey

3 posted 2001-01-23 11:12 AM

very good, i like it very much

AniKay83
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since 2000-06-28

Posts 388
Missing Since 1999

4 posted 2001-01-23 01:26 PM

nothing left to love, nothing left to grasp
caged by walls, a suitcase full of an ugly past,
immersed in life's vacancy, never to digrese,
crucified by tidal waves of distress,
unable to rid my body of this dirty lie
no matter how hard I scrub and cry,
=============================================
I love those lines, I can totally identify.
I really enjoyed this piece.

"Hearts will become practical when they make them unbreakable"
~The Wizard of Oz
Much love all,
Krissie

Bee
Junior Member

since 2000-11-23

Posts 23
Ireland

5 posted 2001-01-24 05:25 PM

So very well written. The dark side within so well enveloped in words.
I can feel your pain and your shame... it just showes you how alive you are to express such a spectrum of emotions.
Thank you for this poem.
Bee

firejerm
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since 2000-06-13

Posts 217
Springfield, OH, good ol USA

6 posted 2001-01-25 01:29 AM

It's a shame that we all here have to find common ground by sharing our pain. However this had a very dark, unique and essentric beauty to it. I loved this. Great work!

Jeremy

"Those little slices of death, how I loathe them."
-Edgar Allen Poe

Chelsea~
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since 2001-02-09

Posts 260
Ontario, CANADA

7 posted 2001-04-13 07:55 PM

oh missy,

this is so sad
and so deep,
thanks for sharing
this with me

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

8 posted 2001-04-17 02:01 AM

Very sad, and deep...
I liked it a lot. A well written piece. Thanks for sharing.. I enjoyed the read.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

9 posted 2001-04-17 02:19 AM

great piece it was written so the reader feels ur thoughts and emotions...i didn't really get to read the 1st version but i liked this...keep writing

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

10 posted 2001-04-18 06:18 PM

I enjoyed this very much. The images of emotion you created reach out and jerked me in, and I stayed with it until the end. Excellent and powerful.

still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

baerlon
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since 2000-01-14

Posts 197
Youngstown and East Liverpool, Ohio, USA

11 posted 2001-04-20 03:22 AM

I liked this very much and prey things become better for you.

There's a peace inside us all
Let it be your friend
It will help you carry on
In the end
There's a peace inside us all
-Creed

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