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strangeh2o
New Member

since 2001-01-18

Posts 6

0 posted 2001-01-20 12:09 PM

DESPERATE YOUTH,
NEVER KNOWING THE TASTE OF LOVE
OR THE FEEL OF BEAUTY.
FINALLY GOT CLOSE TO LOVE
BUT IT STUNG LIKE A SWIFT SLAP.
IT HAPPENED AGAIN AND AGAIN
UNTIL THE SLAPS BEGAN TO LEAVE HER DAZED.
THOUGHT SHE'D FOUND SOMEONE WHO'D BE DIFFERENT,
BUT TIME AND DISTANCE CAUSED FEELINGS TO CRUMBLE.
HAPPINESS BEGAN TO SEEM UNOBTAINABLE
AS EVERYTHING RESEMBLING LOVE
BECAME WORN AND RAGGED IN TIME.
SHE FELT THE EMOTIONAL STINGS THAT SOMETIMES HURT
WORSE THAN A PUNCH IN THE GUT.
IT WAS A HURT SHE WAS FAMILIAR WITH.
SHE'D KNOWN THE HARM WORDS CAN DO SINCE CHILDHOOD.
UNFAITHFULNESS, MENTAL EXHAUSTION, PAIN.....
IT MADE HER BITTER, SO BITTER.
ALL SHE WANTS IS SOMEONE WHO CAN RELATE,
SOMEONE WHO UNDERSTANDS,
SOMEONE WHO CAN TURN THE BITTERNESS
INTO A SWEET TASTE.

SHE FEELS LIKE NO ONE UNDERSTANDS
WHERE SHE'S COMING FROM.
SHE FEELS LIKE NO ONE UNDERSTANDS
THE WAY SHE KNOWS GOD.
SHE FEELS LIKE NO ONE CAN RELATE
TO THE DESPERATIONS SHE'S KNOWN IN HER LIFE.
SHE FEELS LIKE NO ONE CAN RELATE
TO THE PAIN OF PAST RELATIONSHIPS.
SHE FEELS LIKE NO ONE UNDERSTANDS
WHY SHE THINKS LIKE SHE DOES.
SHE FEELS LIKE NO ONE UNDERSTANDS
WHY SHE ACTS LIKE SHE DOES.

SHE'S BECOME A DEEP PERSON.
SHE'S BECOME A LOVING PERSON.
BUT HER BITTERNESS REALLY MAKES ME WANT TO CRY.
ALL SHE WANTS IS SOMEONE WHO CAN RELATE,
SOMEONE WHO UNDERSTANDS,
SOMEONE WHO CAN TURN THE BITTERNESS
INTO A SWEET TASTE.

Ginners
Member

since 2000-07-22

Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey

1 posted 2001-01-20 11:51 AM

I really enjoyed reading this, but the all caps are slightly annoying, i think it would be more visually comforting if you could take the time to change that. but the words touched me and this is prob. the poem i relate to most of those here on passions. I know how this feels more then anyone will ever know or could know. this is by far one of the best poems i have read in my life, maybe it is because i know these feelings better then any other, i am not sure. but i found this to be truely amazing and you have taken so many things i have never been able to put into words and make them into a beautiful poem that speaks to my heart. I am very thankful for that and i look forward to reading many more poems and if this is any indication of the type of writer you are i know that you have found a home here on passions and you will be a welcomed addition. have fun and please dont ever stop writing!
-Gin

"I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN
"There is no always forever, just this"-the cure

WinterTalon
Member

since 2001-01-14

Posts 141
Brooksville, KY, USA

2 posted 2001-01-20 07:50 PM

I reallly relate with the her... and that's rather sad. BTW, welcome...

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~

bluebrdy65
Member

since 2000-05-16

Posts 276
Gladys,

3 posted 2001-01-20 08:57 PM

Bring her here
this is where we all find things we can relate to and share
Good Job
jane

strangeh2o
New Member

since 2001-01-18

Posts 6

4 posted 2001-01-21 12:02 PM

Thanks for the encouragement from all of you. Gin, that was an especially nice response to read. Sorry about the caps, that's just the way I have all my stuff on my hard drive. I'll change it next time.

Jerry

just_another_fe
Member

since 2000-02-05

Posts 483
MICHIGAN

5 posted 2001-01-21 12:16 PM

dont really know what to say.....it was a good read though. keep up the good work

Joel the wolf
Senior Member

since 2000-04-06

Posts 1333
Angels Camp

6 posted 2001-01-21 11:24 AM

A great Poem my friend, and if true, all you can do is just stand by her, there is strength in just being there.
Again a great poem.

Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

armanca
Member

since 1999-07-07

Posts 211
Tennessee

7 posted 2001-01-22 12:39 PM

I feel like i'm rather one of the lucky ones, because as I read this poem. I can hear your voice reading it, and it is so powerful spoken (very moving). You know it's my favorite.

Carman

taramw
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 738

8 posted 2001-01-22 05:26 AM

Welcome to DP

Yeah... nice poem... agreed with the comments above. Elicited sadness when I read it. Take care.

~ Tara ~

may you live all the days of your life. -- jonathan swift

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

9 posted 2001-01-22 12:32 PM

just a quick title suggestion, as i see no one else has offered one..lol i might call it "someone" or maybe.. "she feels..."

great write

hugs, g

"i was thinkin'
if you were lonely
maybe we could leave here
and no one would know
at least not to the point where we would think so..."

Suzanne Arlene
Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 377
Ontario, Canada

10 posted 2001-01-22 07:54 PM

powerful stuff welcome Suzanne

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

11 posted 2001-01-22 09:19 PM

Welcome to passions...

nice entry..

Please check your email

K

strangeh2o
New Member

since 2001-01-18

Posts 6

12 posted 2001-01-22 10:33 PM

Thanks again for all the nice replies. dg, I kind of like 'she feels'. I may use that. Carman, thanks for telling me about this site.

Jerry

ThyWizard
Member

since 2000-08-06

Posts 56
Chambersburg, PA, USA

13 posted 2001-01-22 11:37 PM

I loved the way it started off angry and keep getting madder(so to speak)

SHE FEELS LIKE NO ONE UNDERSTANDS
WHERE SHE'S COMING FROM.
i like the way that section was handled and it was pure beauty by following it up with such an awesome ending. Excellent piece...rock on dude

" If who i am is what i have and what i have is lost, then who am I? " - unknown

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