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Rene_M
Junior Member
since 1999-11-19
Posts 26
Melrose Park, IL, 60160

0 posted 2001-01-16 04:39 PM


I sit alone in the dark
And as much as I yearn and enjoy
solitude and obscurity
I'm still in search of someone
to share these lonely nights with.

I don't have anyone to look up at the stars with
Anyone to enjoy this new obscure pleasure with
Anyone to express my emotions with
Anyone to help save me from myself

I can't scream neither in anger or agony
straining myself enough to attain
relief from these feelings.
I can't cry niether some or at all
to let out emotions and tears to wash away
all my burdens and fears

I spend restless nights thinking I'm weak
For I seem to need someone to be
my best-friend
my partner in crime
and my sweetheart
Is that wrong?
Where did I go wrong?

I always thought I would be happier in solitude.
Yet somehow I still feel empty and incomplete
Can it be that I really need the love
of someone as more than a friend?
Maybe....however I still have no intrest in looking
Call me lazy or call me crazy
I just don't think I'd be right for anyone,
because I'm barely right
for myself.

I just wish I had someone to sit alone with at night
and look up at the stars
Someone to help me express my emotions better
Someone to help save me from myself.

Though I can't wish my life away
I remain completely alone and will always seem to be
I've got nothing to gain and nothing to lose
except maybe...my self-esteem.
Then again life's a risk


What do you think??



© Copyright 2001 Rene F. Morales Jr. - All Rights Reserved
Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
1 posted 2001-01-16 06:13 PM


What do I think?  Well I believe that life is a risk.  Everyday is that of a new journey and that without it life could get pretty boring. Yet I do understand your poem greatly.  For I, myself have felt this way at a time in my life.  I know that it seems you are alone.  But actually you arent.  And one day, maybe far down the road, you will find that *special* someone made just for you.  Someone that will give YOU all the love and friendship that you deserve.  Look around that *person* might be standing behind you...... who knows!  

Peace,
Mags


No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry


Krawdad
Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597

2 posted 2001-01-17 12:04 PM


Rene_M,
Well, humans are a gregarious lot, at least part of the time.  So, you need someone(you'll notice that there is a lot of that going around at this site).  Nothing new.
I would only suggest, just as a practicle exercise, that you turn this poem around, as if you were reading it from another author in this seemingly endless dilema.  Now, someone needs you.  Try rewritting the poem from that perspective.  

Krawdad  

/:^)==
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dgvarner
Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
3 posted 2001-01-17 10:50 AM


yes..i must say i'm relating to this one.. it would be easier to be able to live alone and be happy with it..but that companionship is much longed for...i know... *sigh*..

but wow!  cool response from krawdad!  turn it around and "now someone is looking for you"!....think about that one..hmmm..  

hugs, g


"oh baby baby, its a wild world..its hard to get by just upon a smile..." cat stevens

Temptress*Moon
Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 240
Long Island, NY
4 posted 2001-01-17 04:17 PM


Hush!*S*
Reading what i just read,anyone would be lucky to have you...When you least expect it, that special someone will be waiting for you....*S*
Temp!



I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH-

Ginners
Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey
5 posted 2001-01-17 04:30 PM


"Someone to help save me from myself"----god, i know this feeling all too well.  and i think that you are a wonderful writer and most likely a wonderful person.  it is hard and it takes time and mistakes, but i am sure you will find someone.  Good luck
mirror man
Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814

6 posted 2001-01-18 02:23 AM


I know how you feel.  You say it well.  And being in much the same way, I'm not really the one to give advice.  Good work.  
taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

7 posted 2001-01-22 05:32 AM


Wow!!!  I cannot fully express how I felt when I read your poem.  I wondered if you were me, writing from the thoughts inside my heart and mind sometimes    Very good indeed.  Take care.

~ Tara ~


may you live all the days of your life. -- jonathan swift

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