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Fog.....(it's finished now!!!!)
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Fog.....(it's finished now!!!!) |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
ok, i'm not done with this i was just sittin at the computer in school and got some ideas, what do you think? i am pretty much finished, but then again nothing anyone ever writes is always finished, just abandoned...... The Fog rising from the street looked like white angels, It made the front yard look like a bar somewhere in heaven, The smoke from my cig. wasn't even noticed amongst the lazy white trails, I couldn't see the streetlights only a few yards away. Then I heard scratchy and rapid footsteps, I was hoping somewhere deep inside that it would be you, I couldn't see who was walking up my front drive way, Then out of the Fog you came my own angel dressed in black, You crawled your way up my front steps through the Fog to me, A white flower stuck lovingly out of your smiling mouth, Taking it from you I said in a quiet whisper "I love you", Your lips softly touched my cheek as you whispered it back, We sat on the porch in the Fog talkin about the love we shared, We were smoking for a while and never noticed when we exhaled, The steps you had just crawled up looked like fuzzy out lines, The doorbell made the Fog around us glow a hazy orange, You took my hand in yours and lead the way to the empty house next door, Into the unfinished upstaris room that only we knew about, You lit a blue candle no one could see it through the think fog, We opened the windows and the fog slowly rolled into the room, Lying on top of me you said everything I ever needed to hear, The glow of the candle made you the most beautiful I had ever seen, Your hands and lips touched me in every place that I wanted, In the Fog filled room we shared something I have only had with you, We talked and smoked some more as the Fog outside began to life, On the horizon a summer sun was just waking up to a world of Fog, The sun quickly melted the Fog away and bathed the earth in an orange glow, We looked at eachother and knew that it was time to get going, On my front porch in the dawn's dull light we sad goodnight, I watched you walk down my street as my heart filled with love, Looking back you waved and quickly turned to walk the 8 miles home, I stood there for a while watching the sun come up and the Fog drift away, Slowly I walked into my house and hoped my parents weren't up yet, Making my way upstairs I heard their shower quietly turn on, I knew that I had made it inside with out being nothiced, Out my window I watched the last white angels of Fog disappear, [This message has been edited by Ginners (edited 01-16-2001).] |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
ok i am done now yippie it got a lot longer, i hope you all enjoy it "I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN "There is no always forever, just this"-the cure |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
someone say something about this please i love you guys please |
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Skoota Junior Member
since 2000-12-23
Posts 28Australia |
I'd say something, but this has left me speechless. Some of your best work ever Gin. Bravo Sim Come to me Kill for me Worship me. Follow everthing I do Act it out before me Godhead - The Reckoning |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
Skotta- thanks somuch you always say the nicest things and make me smile  |
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armanca Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211Tennessee |
This would make a wonderful beginning to a book Carman |
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Temptress*Moon Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 240Long Island, NY |
This left me thinking of that foggy California night, the one i shared with a very special person...good work.... Temp! I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH- |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
carman- thank you i will remember that if i should ever write a short story temp- thank you as well, it is about a foggy new jersey night i spent with some one special i am glad that it brought back memories of yours |
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