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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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He perhaps I whimpered across the ether, my lonely emerged and my alone searched for the profound so quiet I didn’t hear my own whisper it’s bound in the impossible I can’t see the way he calls heaven yet I am only of the earth he calls the waves of an ocean maid and sees her eyes, catches dreams and cries out hold me oh hold me with your heart these arms are heavy, my dreams are wrought of finality don’t elevate me, I cannot carry the weight of exaltation, time is not my friend yet he passions his reality I question when I ceased to believe in miracle, an only, and I’d define the days if there weren’t so many I’m blinded, I’m bound he can’t dance his way through the curls of hurt, my cover the inevitable is in defeat, so shuddered and he oh and such intensity wounds me he’s myth, my sweet immortal unearthly and the sky contains me he graces stars and carves statues from words, so I’ll keep to the world here, afraid © K. Mahony |
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howpeculiar Member
since 2000-12-12
Posts 56 |
~graces stars and carves statues from words, so I’ll keep to the world here, afraid~ Bam! If the words before these lines were matches balanced over brushwood, then this stanza/ token was the kindling, catalyst, and embers all ablaze. Struck me straight through… if I could, I’d like say I’ve felt -- what seems to me -- the same as what you illustrate (and so, so finely). May you rise to the company of the stars, or lasso your pedestal-placed item and show them the wonders of solid ground. Be well. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is amazing. So glad I stopped in and found it. Sandra |
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He Junior Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 41 |
Bittersweet verse of knowing and to turn overwhelming yesterdays 'pon which dreams were murdered year after tear the mountian built so high the clouds envelope a summit she crys untouchable he shrugs again and gauges the darkwood pathless ascent brambled in iron torn from life baptized in hearts blood gone black where none are said to pass that cry from ether born haunts his soul tasks him marks him he is known to self time has taken him already as surely as the tides of the ocean maid He pauses but to breathe the light regardless his fate only knowing it is enough reaching high beyond dreams plucks a star burning white to place before her He will carry it to the end of days Defiant transcends the unbreaking stride midst the whirlwinds he climbs today tommorrow forever a whisper his only guide [This message has been edited by He (edited 01-15-2001).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed reading your poem Severn..James |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow...for both "She" and "He"!!!! |
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Temptress*Moon Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 240Long Island, NY |
Amazing! I was caught by every word...Loving this poem  Temp I slept and dreamed that life was beauty was thy dream then a shadowy lie? -ESH- |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Your ability to "carve statues" from words will be an asset to you thru the years.... let me just say: Fair Lady of K, Thou knowest how drawn the trouvere are to thee singing their Chanson De Geste while down on bended knee Call upon your sagacious court listen to the beat of your own wise heart prior to opening up your port Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
two thumbs up! excellent, as always, Kamla. Michael |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
don't be afraid. Great lines, great expression.... Kathleen |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
Beautiful!!! Simply astounding ... Cheers. |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
Impressed! Wow, this reads off as two different sides. The first side is one speaking of a lover, so entranced in the love affair the subject is near lost. Two, a spiritual endeavor, about God or subjects Hight Power, speaking devotedly of his/her power over humanity. I like this one very much! With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
howpeculiar - What a wonderful analogical effect...I appreciate hearing that you know - big thankyous... The interesting thing is that I think I am more pedastalled than 'he' is lol. But only in jest of course...Sandra - well thankyou hon for stopping by and I think the amazing is pretty amazing itself. He - hm. I'm getting away with wordless...smiles. James - and I thankyou for reading... Karen - heh...wow eh? Hugs you... Temptress - well, thankyou. That gave me a huge smile...welcome to passions btw. Jamie - you are ever wise dear. Sometimes the heart has to be followed I suppose...hugs Mr Poet Michael - nice to hear from you (oh but I really wanted three you know...heh ~grin~) Thankyou Mr Linda...hehehehehe (beat me up later - I understand...)Kathleen - hey hon...thanks for reading...well, fear is a hard thing to walk past sometimes. Fear can keep us safe sometimes, as much as do us harm. Hugs. Verve - all I can say is thankyou...so - thankyou... Dragon - lol. The analogy started as a great joke...it has evolved somewhat. Smiles and thankyou...I'm glad it came through... KStrokes of ink, words, dreams like Waking mountains make intimate conversations With my shadow From 'Words in the Night' by Jeff Geddes |
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Zyell Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 121USA |
Severn, It's difficult to produce an original, stamped, this is mine, you have created just such, I do like what you do with words! keep it up~ *S* Z Life is an adventure to be experienced |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
I also was glad to have hung a left in here, great imagery, and yes your right about fear it is hard to walk bye, I just wrote about it myself. thanks for the read kid. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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