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Zyell
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since 2000-07-28
Posts 121
USA

0 posted 2001-01-14 10:09 PM


in a makeshift unprepared he sees the eyes
she lays exposed, cold
no longer breathing or needing warmth
he discovers her next to him
isolated in the body, alone
his hand a fragile trembling,
he touches the face, her face
without direction or confirmation
he knows
lean, silver, and gold
the years they shared,
he makes the arrangements
this love he loved
but never as he should

is gone

he separates the smiles
caressing memories
in his hand, a malaise as he dazes
at lost possibilities
the depression is a minion
sobs racking
an aging body
filled with regret

                      


Life is an adventure
to be experienced

© Copyright 2001 Zyell - All Rights Reserved
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 2001-01-14 10:19 PM


So sad, the emptiness and all he feels now.
Always these sort of poems affect me more.
Sensitively and beautifully written.
Reminds me of the Aussie song..
Hey there's not a cloud in sight,
It's as blue as your blue eyes,
And I thought that it would rain -
The Day You Went Away....


Isis


*The heart of education is the education of the heart...*
~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit.


Zyell
Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 121
USA
2 posted 2001-01-14 10:30 PM


Isis: thank you so much for your
kind words, may your regrets
be few...

*S*

Z

Life is an adventure
to be experienced

WinterTalon
Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141
Brooksville, KY, USA
3 posted 2001-01-14 10:40 PM


That was powerful.  *pouts*  I'll never be this good...
Scarlet Lady
Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 242
Midwest
4 posted 2001-01-15 12:28 PM


Excellent poem...but oooo so sad.  What makes it even sadder is,  this happens way too often.  This is the sort of writing that makes one think about those loved ones who are still with us,  and how we should tell them & SHOW THEM how we feel NOW....before they are gone.  Thank you!
Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

5 posted 2001-01-15 12:53 PM


Just wonderful...melancholy at its finest...

he separates the smiles
caressing memories
in his hand, a malaise as he dazes
at lost possibilities

loss is one of the finest educators we have, sadly...

K


Strokes of ink, words, dreams like
Waking mountains make intimate conversations
With my shadow

From 'Words in the Night' by Jeff Geddes

firecrakker
Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235
Virginia
6 posted 2001-01-15 03:11 PM


What a tragic, yet beautiful poem. It's amazing how much we take for granted in this life, isn't it?

Sheila

Zyell
Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 121
USA
7 posted 2001-01-15 10:51 PM


Poetic E, Illusion, Severn, Firecrakker,

you'll never
know how much I appreciate other's reading
my work, and when the comments are as positive as this, well, it does a heart
good, thank each of you very much!

*S*
Z

Life is an adventure
to be experienced

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