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firejerm
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since 2000-06-13
Posts 217
Springfield, OH, good ol USA

0 posted 2001-01-14 07:58 PM



Every shadow hides behind me
Every night I lie awake,
Every thought of you torments my soul
Just how much more can I take?

Alone at night I hear a whisper
Every breath I smell your perfume,
Closing my eyes I taste your lips
Yet I'm on my own in an empty room.

Images of you run by my window
Your girlish laugh haunts me raw,
I wake at night in chilling sweat
Somewhere in the distance my name is called.

You have found this center in me
You chewed it up and spit it out,
Reaching for you through the darkness
Praying to sanity to shred my doubt.

My blood you drank and left me drained
You walked away never looked back,
Like a cat of prey hunting at night
You invisioned me and planned your attack.

Over my shoulder I find myself looking
Clutching my heart to prevent its loss,
Running for my life and love that's gone
Protecting integrity at any cost.

Leave me alone to rebuild myself
Leave me here to perhaps die alone,
Prey on another for I have nothing left
Perhaps I'm better off on my own.

Jeremy T. Sellers
1/14/01
7:42 PM

"Those little slices of death, how I loathe them."
-Edgar Allen Poe

© Copyright 2001 Jeremy T. Sellers - All Rights Reserved
bluebrdy65
Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 276
Gladys,
1 posted 2001-01-14 08:53 PM


Oh Jeremy how tragic
and beautifully written
I kinda of know how you feel
only I still am hanging on
and hoping.
Thank you so much for your reply
to lost trust
Be strong and I know its hard

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 2001-01-14 10:07 PM


So sad Jeremy, but time DOES heal all wounds, each day little by little you will be able to loosen your grip on your heart.  You will learn to live, trust and love again.

Isis

*The heart of education is the education of the heart...*
~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit.


Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
3 posted 2001-01-14 11:42 PM


Ouch!

Mags


No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry


SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

4 posted 2001-01-15 12:08 PM


~Truly a heavy write. This stuff aches. Expressed hauntingly well. *Peace you.
Scarlet Lady
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since 2000-02-11
Posts 242
Midwest
5 posted 2001-01-15 12:45 PM


Jeremy....you are one intense poet who is definitely full of passion and incredible talent!  

"Perhaps I'm better off on my own."

Somehow I know that is NOT true!  You are just hurting and desperate to not let go of this love you found that filled you so deeply....and that is completely natural.  Just my own insight!  You do release your feelings very well,  and she is a lucky girl.....whoever you write for!  


JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
6 posted 2001-01-15 11:10 AM


Jeremy,
Deep hurt here. Wonderfuly expressed. And btw, thanks for replying to my poem.

Joy

Verve
Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348
Singapore
7 posted 2001-01-16 02:31 PM



"Every night I lie awake,
Every thought of you torments my soul
Just how much more can I take?"

These lines really got to me ... You said it all so well ...
Good stuff.


WinterTalon
Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141
Brooksville, KY, USA
8 posted 2001-01-16 05:11 PM


No particular line touched me... the entire poem tore at my heart.  Such pain should not have to be endured by any creature...

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~


WinterTalon
Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141
Brooksville, KY, USA
9 posted 2001-01-16 05:11 PM


Keep up the good writing, btw.  I've rarely been so touched...< !signature-->

~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~



[This message has been edited by PoeticEnchantress (edited 01-16-2001).]

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