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Ordinary Child

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Severn
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0 posted 01-10-2001 06:19 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn

Ordinary Child


Itís all in the ordinary,
what we taste
and discard

Itís the basis, the place
where we decide who
and how

to trust

Iíve never been comfortable there,
commonised,
but all searches begin
in such a way

fixed within myself
are my travels, the lines
of journey

I started slow

       empty

an ordinary child

Iíll never return, Iím strange
and learned
itís all irrevocable for innocence
euphemises ignorance

and yes, Iíve lost,
     it could be called emotively Ė
         to suffer

and have you found that hurt
is a sharp halo?

Oh come, you cannot deny
youíre covered too
you and your ordinary child
still held inside


© K. Mahony



Strokes of ink, words, dreams like
Waking mountains make intimate conversations
With my shadow

From 'Words in the Night' by Jeff Geddes
© Copyright 2001 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
Dark Angel
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1 posted 01-10-2001 06:28 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

This is beautiful K, very deep.

You're a pretty remarkable ordinary child my dear  

Excellent work from you as usual K, it is great to read you again  

Maree

I need a lullaby
a kiss goodnight
Angel sweet love of my life
Oh, I need this

~Natalie Merchant~
a-alibaster
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2 posted 01-10-2001 07:49 AM       View Profile for a-alibaster   Email a-alibaster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit a-alibaster's Home Page   View IP for a-alibaster

Yes, this certianly threw a ringer in my non-thinking day, but am glad!
Seems I always strived to NOT be the ordinary child...
I enjoyed this morning read very much!
Until...ali


"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.


[This message has been edited by a-alibaster (edited 01-10-2001).]
DreamSeeker
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3 posted 01-10-2001 08:47 AM       View Profile for DreamSeeker   Email DreamSeeker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DreamSeeker

Whirlwind life
how we manage to
absorb the typhoon
yet always unattaining
the eye of serenity
calming mile

slashing winds
rain down 'pon
anviled hearts
do lie beneath
halos razor edged

and yet a moment
awakens unbidden
unasked to cloak
within the deluge
all that life has wrought

light from nowhere
and everywhere
simultaneous synchronicity
shadows flee
they no longer have a meaning

the child steps out
mighty and mischievious
birthed in hearts blood true
but smiling at the dawn
unashamedly believing tomorrows truth


Professor Gloom
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4 posted 01-10-2001 02:58 PM       View Profile for Professor Gloom   Email Professor Gloom   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Professor Gloom's Home Page   View IP for Professor Gloom

I enjoyed the poem,
expressed well in short phrases.

Gloom
Kit McCallum
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5 posted 01-10-2001 07:25 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

"and have you found that hurt
is a sharp halo?"

Love that line Kamla ... this was a wonderful thought provoking read, very much enjoyed!  

Best wishes,
/Kit
Jamie
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6 posted 01-10-2001 09:23 PM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

We are all ordinary people who on occasion manage something extraordinary--- you more often than most.


Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".  





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JamesMichael
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7 posted 01-11-2001 01:36 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

"and have you found that hurt is a sharp halo?"   Enjoyed reading your poem..James
insanepoet
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8 posted 01-11-2001 11:56 PM       View Profile for insanepoet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for insanepoet

Hey, I really liked this.  I don't stop in and read a lot of poetry which is selfish I know...but I followed this one til the end.  It was a great read.  Yes, I like it, even though you seem to have buried my true user name "firejerm"    For everything I do apologize.

Jeremy

"Those little slices of death, how I loathe them"-Edgar Allen Poe
Severn
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9 posted 01-12-2001 05:09 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Roo...hon, from one deep one to another - thankyou...lol. We drink from the same deep my friend.  

Ali - I don't know that any child is ordinary per se - twas just using poetic licence to make my poetic point lol...I have always wondered if ordinary actually exists...I suppose I meant more 'simple' - uninfused by life...I'm glad your morning appreciated the poem, thank you...  

K - always unattaining...hey, but do you think if we did attain it we'd be happier? Sadly, my friend, I think we'd be bored...lol. That one little cap sticks out a mile btw...heh. And what, L I, might tomorrow's truth be? Are you a seer? LOL..thankyou for your words in this poetic way...

Gloom - and thankyou for reading...I try different styles - I seem to be exploring the art of making spaces and falters flow...a paradox, but hey - you have to try right?

Kit - hey! Thanks for stopping by...methinks you were checking in. Love that! It's appreciated too...hugs and thanks.

J - awwwww...wow. Thank you...I think so too...everyone and the extraordinary. I think you are pretty extraordinary - I mean...your house has survived the Dee Dee storm after all...just! ~grin~

James - glad you enjoyed...I wonder about that line...can a halo be sharp? Thanks  

I poet - Hmmm. Well, first I will say thankyou. Second - selfish? Ah well..it comes down to time right? And inclination...I don't think it is likely you are selfish at all.   Thirdly, your true username I know nothing about. You haven't listed your email so please email me if you wish and tell me what is going on? What do you mean buried? Can you not get in under that name? If any members are banned, or denied temporary access I have absolutely no say in that - it is Ron's department. It might be an idea to write to him also to find out what is happening with Firejerm.  

  K

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10 posted 01-26-2001 05:33 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

I'm glad I've decided to check the poems out here in DP once again
I seen the loss i've suffered by not being around here
Your definition of hurt intrigues me
as the poem feeds into my imagination
kinda like having wings but not the capability to fly  
or maybe we choose not too
or even to scared
all we have to do is learn to
I think i'm not making any sense  
loving the post

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


silentsky
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11 posted 01-27-2001 02:26 PM       View Profile for silentsky   Email silentsky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for silentsky

i dont have anything particularly original to say in response to your poem. i liked it a lot, especially the line:
and have you found that hurt
is a sharp halo?

yes, i have found that.
mmm...extremely good poem.
lately my poetry has become extremely bad (hehe) but maybe this will give me a bit of inspiration for something a bit better.
nicely done
shira
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12 posted 01-27-2001 02:26 PM       View Profile for silentsky   Email silentsky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for silentsky

i dont have anything particularly original to say in response to your poem. i liked it a lot, especially the line:
and have you found that hurt
is a sharp halo?

yes, i have found that.
mmm...extremely good poem.
lately my poetry has become extremely bad (hehe) but maybe this will give me a bit of inspiration for something a bit better.
nicely done
shira
He
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13 posted 01-27-2001 09:38 PM       View Profile for He   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for He

Well now
The day

YOU are ordinary

the universe would
simply implode
in tears of
blinded mirrors

and yes
you tell me

would love
real in Every moment
make a difference

You tell me
my love

"Changes"
           Are
We      
mystic requiem
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14 posted 01-28-2001 03:05 PM       View Profile for mystic requiem   Email mystic requiem   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mystic requiem

Simply wonderful!
I see depth in your painting
of words to the page.
More please.
*thanx*

mYsTiC
Honeybee
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15 posted 01-28-2001 09:15 PM       View Profile for Honeybee   Email Honeybee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Honeybee


Very well expressed in depth, many I am sure will relate to this,  It is very clever  

Take care,
Melissa


The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams


Jamie
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16 posted 03-29-2001 06:55 PM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

Library thingie hon.....

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Severn
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17 posted 03-29-2001 06:59 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

LOL

I am...just saw this pop up...HUGS YOU...

(you like this one eh?)  


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18 posted 03-30-2001 12:03 AM       View Profile for Xeonox   Email Xeonox   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Xeonox

This poetry resembles a war that is fought when one does not act in accord with the society and its endless chain of laws. The rythmic tone seems to be a little off. I would suggest that the flowing of your words be like a stream rather than a river(not so choppy).

Ronil (Inspiration for my poems is all around me for my muse is my reality.)

mc
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19 posted 03-30-2001 02:37 AM       View Profile for mc   Email mc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit mc's Home Page   View IP for mc

Hello my friend...
WOW!! I just came back
and to find with such words
makes me feel like I've been lost
for so long...
I liked it a lot!!!
coyote
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20 posted 03-30-2001 12:10 PM       View Profile for coyote   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for coyote

"itís all irrevocable for innocence
euphemises ignorance"

"and have you found that hurt
is a sharp halo?"

These are hardly ordinary thoughts.
Glad Jamie pulled the thread back up.
Thanks.
I loved it.  

"The poet is the priest of the invisible."
Wallace Stevens

Martie
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21 posted 03-30-2001 07:00 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Kamla--Very thought filled and thought provoking...yes, halos can be sharp, it all depends on what they're made of...and my child is what keeps me searching.
Severn
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22 posted 03-31-2001 09:31 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Thankyou all for reading and replying...



Your comments mean much...

Xeonex - I understand what you say here...twas designed the way it is though - to produce a certain effect - the one which you picked up on, I suppose it will work for some and not others lol...

mc - so GREAT to see you here...

Jamie - you're a love aren't you?

K
Jamie
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23 posted 09-08-2001 11:49 AM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

as a matter of fact, yes i am  


HK>LK

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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VERY deep...and left my thoughts provoked...loved the read,Severn

if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take - when thugs cry-

 
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