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In memory of a guy i knew.

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princess^sarah
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0 posted 06-24-2001 11:14 PM       View Profile for princess^sarah   Email princess^sarah   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for princess^sarah

One day when I was walking,
I passed a boy near me,
He was all bruuised and beaten
From his head down to his knees.
His face showed no emotion,
The shirt he wore was torn.
He walked like he was nothing,
He wished he'd never been born.

But still I walked with steady strides,
Along my merry track.
If I had of known at that time,
I'd probably would of raced back.

Still, by the time I reached my home,
Turned around and closed the gate.
I watched the news and saw the boy,
No, it was too late.

The boy had held a gun up high,
A gun raised above his head.
The sweet boy is gone forever more,
Yes, the boy is dead.

This is such a sad one
© Copyright 2001 sarah alford - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 06-25-2001 12:05 AM       View Profile for Skyfire   Email Skyfire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfire

Oh wow, that ending is so not what I was expecting! That was brilliant (I think, anyway)!
Rhonda  

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2 posted 06-26-2001 12:57 AM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Sad poem yes......I didn't see this as glorification. I saw this as just a sad tale of a guy you thought you could have saved somehow. I liked it.
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3 posted 06-26-2001 01:21 AM       View Profile for Mykels_Angel   Email Mykels_Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mykels_Angel

oops i mean a   not a >
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4 posted 06-27-2001 07:49 PM       View Profile for anonymous albert ?   Email anonymous albert ?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymous albert ?

^..uh..huh?.. ...anyways...this is indeed a sad life you told...i really liked it...the ending was very powerful Sarah...bye

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5 posted 06-27-2001 08:15 PM       View Profile for TopGunLauren   Email TopGunLauren   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TopGunLauren's Home Page   View IP for TopGunLauren

I just wrote a poem like this about my friend who killed himself a few days ago. But people actually read your poems so keep up the awsome work.Your poem was very well writen.
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6 posted 09-07-2001 03:07 PM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Yes it is a sad piece but unfortunately a reality. Things like this happen every day and if people have a course nothing will stop them from sailing it.

Nice piece Sarah.  

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