Teen Poetry #4 |
Missing you.............. |
Ski*Chick Member
since 2001-01-13
Posts 141Fitchburg, Mass, Usa |
Missing you…….. You come into my dreams you don't remember me I say I'm the one who loves chocolate I want to cry because you're dying I think oh my gosh is this real again or just a dream? I get so scared because you are dead You scare me your face looks so white as a ghost your body is skinny and limp But all it was a dream ~*~Minna~*~ Learning how to walk, Learning how to talk, are the hardest thing to do in a baby life. Learning how to walk for me is the hardest thing to do. |
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angel_2401 Member
since 2001-06-12
Posts 131Cincinnati, OH |
This is good, I like it.... Keep writing! I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
this is so so sad i really liked all of it, especially your first line. very nicely done. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
this is the first one i have read of yours and it was good i liked it a lot keep posting one morning you wake up afraid you are going to live |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
very sad...and i also really liked the first line...great job overall ...bye im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is so sad. Nice work. Very powerful and emotional... I enjoyed this. --Marie "Well the sun is slowly sinking down, but the moon is slowly rising. So this old world must still be spinning ‘round, and I still love you."–James T. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
So sad....*sigh*.....get better... |
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