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anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15

Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US

0 posted 2001-06-21 01:47 AM

i might leave this one as it is...or i might extend it to be longer..not sure

won't you
won't you
won't you even try to speak
even whisper in my ear
when i am asleep?
tell me what i've forgotten
so that i remember you forever
come with me for a ride
in the tides
in the tides

won't you come and drown with me?
in the evening...
don't you know?
don't you know what's underneath?

"When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro"

[This message has been edited by anomaly187 (edited 06-21-2001).]

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-06-21 02:17 AM

interesting...kinda confusing...but enjoyable meaning you were writing here...great job!...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2001-06-21 03:30 PM

I liked this. It's different from what I've seen from you, but I liked it. Nice work.

--Marie

"Well the sun is slowly sinking down, but the moon is slowly rising... so this old world must still be spinning 'round. And I still love you." -James

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-06-22 03:16 AM

Bloody hell, I've seen the grace of Heaven!
This was simply amazing. I really loved the deepness within this poe. Anomaly, it's always such a pleasure to read your work. I have been a fan since I first joined. You are a poet to admire. Such wonderful work, I loved it. Hit home right away

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

4 posted 2001-06-22 12:09 PM

I liked it. It is the first of yours that I have read, and I look forward to many more.

*~*Amanda*~*

I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.
Why couldn't I stop until I had died?
It was hate

obscurity of cloud
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since 2001-05-11

Posts 294
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5 posted 2001-06-22 02:31 PM

I really liked the line "tell me what i've forgotten" ...very powerful. Excellent work!

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

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