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the_rescue
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0 posted 2001-06-20 08:15 PM


Ah this thing called a crush
twists you around and turns you to much
you can talk yet on their words you hang
then you feel stupid for the song you sang
the one that basically stated your every feeling
and now with humiliation your dealing

those feelings I've felt for you for some time
and I'm treated as though it's just a crime
I ask you to call me but I get no answer
your in my head like a tumor a cancer
24-7 your on my mind
well maybe not that much let me rewind
I value the things you do I love your personality
maybe I'm just being stupid not using rationality
I'm sorry I don't get nor understand you at all
you say you love me then wont even call
I try to call you but you tell me I better not
is there something here that my mind forgot
some little bit of info that I could heed
would you help me in my time of need
I don't understand so much about you
but one thing I know is that my feelings are true
it's wierd just to let you know
your on my mind often no matter where I go.
You'd rather chase some guy around from show to show
while i'm here each day, yet you don't even know
Sorry I'll shut my mouth now my words are in vain
cause you'll run after another leaving me almost slain


I'm not asking U 2 luv me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say

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1 posted 2001-06-20 09:15 PM


*sniff, sniff* that was sad. You did a really great job on this one,I really felt your pain (not as much as you are, but you know what I mean). I hope things get better, and if they dont, just remember that girls can be so incredibly dense that it surprises even us. We don't do it often but when we do, everybody knows it. Good job!
Rhonda  

"Who did that?" "Charlie and Blake." "Who's Charlie and Blake?" "Rhonda and Amy.""Great. There goes the school."

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2 posted 2001-06-20 10:22 PM


if she's stupid then... why do you like her?  sorry i had to ask that.  I think relationships suck out loud, but its kinda wierd to say you love her and then call her stupid in your poem title.  If a guy liked me, i'd be a tiny bit upset if he did that.

dr. jo-bizz

But His word was in my heart
like a burning fire
Shut up in my bones;
I was weary of holding back,
And I could not.

ethel lahootie
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3 posted 2001-06-20 11:03 PM


it can go the other way around too....stupid boy!! i can totally relate to this...cept it was a guy obviously! haha good job on showing these emotions! -ethel
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4 posted 2001-06-21 01:00 AM


your last 2 lines in this are fabulous, and the rest is great too!  nice work!

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

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5 posted 2001-06-21 01:06 AM


hun is this for that one girl? cus i know it ain't for me (darn!) oh well talk to ya later. btw really good poem!
robin

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6 posted 2001-06-21 02:28 AM


I really enjoyed this poem.  I can relate to basically every word.  I know how it feels.. sorry you had to go through this.  I hope you feel better.  Nicely done.

--Marie

"Well the sun is slowly sinking down, but the moon is slowly rising... so this old world must still be spinning 'round. And I still love you." -James

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7 posted 2001-06-22 03:03 AM


GReat job here. I like this one!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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