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trying tribute to e. e. cummings (200th post)

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0 posted 06-19-2001 09:37 PM       View Profile for obscurity of cloud   Email obscurity of cloud   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for obscurity of cloud

i dreamt of dreamers dreaming
spin the spun and spanned the globe
trip a tight rope robbing trill
enjoy your ever flimflam flow

"sleep wake hope and then"
call the callers number blind
moan the mournful mourning's morn
slide the slidden, breathe the brethren

can you feel the heartfelt pounding
pining at your windowsill?
please the pass the table turns
turning life like lulling love

"sun moon stars rain"
mix of many may melodrama mud
mercy on the stones of strife
beams down eternal and smiles my soul


"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

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1 posted 06-19-2001 09:51 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

Wowers.. I'm very impressed.  I read this through once, and read it again, only aloud.  It sounded so cool.  Your use of alliteration really worked for the flow.  Awesome work.  I enjoyed this a LOT.

--Marie

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Sandpaper tears corrode the filth,
And I need you now somehow." --Silverchair

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2 posted 06-19-2001 10:48 PM       View Profile for Child of the Stars   Email Child of the Stars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Child of the Stars

Now this....is my...kind of poetry.... awesome....simply greatness. Library, of course.....

~Carly

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3 posted 06-19-2001 10:49 PM       View Profile for Child of the Stars   Email Child of the Stars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Child of the Stars

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4 posted 06-20-2001 12:40 AM       View Profile for anonymous albert ?   Email anonymous albert ?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymous albert ?

wow!!!...i loved this piece...you written this with soo much beauty...amazing job!...hope to see more soon...and im glad to see you post again ...also itw as  agreat tribute.. ...ohh and CONGRATS on the 200!!!...sorry i keep forgetting to say stuff.. ...bye


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this is really really cute!!!!!!!! Love it Love it Love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!  

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Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

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6 posted 06-21-2001 10:56 PM       View Profile for obscurity of cloud   Email obscurity of cloud   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for obscurity of cloud

i don't know if this made sense to any of you, but thanks for responding!  I'm still working on the sense part of it....  

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

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7 posted 06-22-2001 02:41 AM       View Profile for punkrockerrobin   Email punkrockerrobin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit punkrockerrobin's Home Page   View IP for punkrockerrobin

awesome poem! congrats on the big 200!!!
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8 posted 06-22-2001 03:26 AM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

AHHHHHHH!!!!!!! E.E. Cummings ROCKS!
I love him! You did so well on this one. I loved it so much. VERY VERY VERY awesome job! Great post for your milestone post count. GOodjob here.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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All I can say is "OOOOHHHHH!!!"  This tickled my funnybone!  

I love those alliterations you use so humourously here!  ESPECIALLY

"enjoy your ever flimflam flow"

Great job!

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

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10 posted 10-05-2002 11:31 AM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

Superb!  I enjoyed this greatly.

You really know how to work with consonance, and that's extremely evident in this poem.  Beautifully crafted.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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