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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
She gazes up into the stars Glued onto the black screen of darkness. Wishing she could be part of that dream Any dream, any dream Any dream But hers. She rides on angel's wings Through the deep blue sky at night What she would give to do it again What she would give to do it again... They carved her body from stone They made her heart from empty air No wonder she couldn't be part of that dream Any dream, any dream Any dream But hers. She sits quietly by the window sill Reaching out, she plucks a flower from the sky Wishing she could be like that Wishing she could be like that... She stares for hours at the mirror The reflection is only echoed light from the glass Perfect and divine, as if from a dream Any dream, any dream Any dream But hers. As her eyes cloud over with innocent mist She breathes her last breath before vanishing Into the star lit night To be part of that dream To be part of that dream. She was nothing but a shadow. ========== Shadows. Everyone has 'em.  Still needs a bit more work in my opinion... |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I think this is really really good! I like this very much |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Very nice! -- Linc "Blood Moon" |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here Leah. I really liked this one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow, Leah! This is awesome. I LOVED the format... the way you ended each stanza.. wowers. This is very impressive, and definitely a library piece. Excellent work. --Marie "Imagine a pageant... |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
this is great. i really like how each stanza took on a physical shape within the words. wonderful work. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
umm LEah!!..right?!..  ...heheh...but awesome work ...i loved the repitition and the dreams...and how you ended it...and overall it was well written...i enjoyed this greatly...bye Deejay  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hey this was kooly! yay bye bye. keeeep postin :-) -fear- "I know the pieces fit cause i watched them fall away"--TooL |
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5_sweet_kisses Junior Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 49 |
Ok, I REALLY like this poem alot, and everyone is doing the whole sunset thingy lately. all well maybe its just me. But that was an awesome poem  Keep up the good workPeeker  |
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