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Wood_Stock
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The little yellow

0 posted 2001-06-19 09:42 AM



- The River -

The lion roars his gutsy scream,
The running river carries with it a forgoten dream.
Through rocks it slowly grinds away,
Fragment by fragment, molding the clay.

And I scream the way the lion does,
The grinding river exposes a fragile love.
Calming the wild rivers flow,
This love could melt the winter snow.

Though, it couldn't melt the cold from you,
And should you freeze then I shall too.
Then once again, I'd hide myself away,
Until another river, could grind these rocks to clay.

This one is for Tegan, should she ever read it...

- Wood_Stock -

[This message has been edited by Wood_Stock (edited 06-20-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-06-19 10:06 AM


wow...very well done! I hope she reads it!  
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2 posted 2001-06-19 02:39 PM


Nice one here. I enjoyed this one a lot. Very well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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3 posted 2001-06-19 05:10 PM


Nicely done!  The flow and rhyme scheme were excellent.  Nice work.  I enjoyed this.

--Marie

"Imagine a pageant...
In my head the flesh seems thicker,
Sandpaper tears corrode the filth,
And I need you now somehow." --Silverchair

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4 posted 2001-06-19 08:58 PM


I really like this, this is really worth sharing!!

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

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5 posted 2001-06-20 12:16 PM


great flow...and a very nicely written piece...i liked it ...bye

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