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the_rescue
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0 posted 2001-06-18 05:34 PM


Sorry hallucination I had to lol

Awakened in the middle of the night
you would wonder what caused such fright
I toss and I turn the whole night through
I'm sorry I don't know what to do
Opps I did it again I messed with your head
man I wish I was brain dead

brittney and justin, justin and brittney
oh my gosh I think their killing me
I turn to the page of my favorite book
I spot brittney and justin as soon as I look
I cover my eyes and run for help
but I open my mouth all I can do is yelp

Sweaty I'm glad it's over that nightmare
I look at the wall all I do is stare
then in my head pops that dreadful song
its there again and it doesn't belong
"cause I want you back"
all I can say is ACK

I run turn on the television
my head starts to split with division
it's her face again I must run and hide
but it's stuck in my head on the insyde
Opps she dead it again she messed with my head
I only wish I was brain dead.

I'm not asking U 2 luv me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say

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Dr. Jo-Bizz
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1 posted 2001-06-18 05:43 PM


hey, i really really really like this one jimmy.  its clever and witty.. you did a good job.  

as for hallucination... "don't hate me.. forever..."

dr. jo

But His word was in my heart
like a burning fire
Shut up in my bones;
I was weary of holding back,
And I could not.

MoeRocko
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2 posted 2001-06-18 05:56 PM


Seeming as how I hate Britney and and N'Suc This Poem is great! It flows so well without any pop tunes to bring it down. Next up.... Lets slam the Backstreet Boys!

If there's a such thing as a Genius, then I'm one. If there's no such thing then I don't care...  ~John Lennon
  

[This message has been edited by Dopey_Dope (edited 06-19-2001).]

Isabel Galaxia
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3 posted 2001-06-18 08:06 PM


Couldn't have said it better myself.  

Bel

ethel lahootie
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4 posted 2001-06-18 09:04 PM


im lovin it!! yup...i think u perty much said....all of it...yup...good job!
ethel

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5 posted 2001-06-19 01:42 AM


This was nice haha. I liked it.

And to Moe's comment, I edited it some of it because a part wasn't appropriate.

Anyway keep writing!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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6 posted 2001-06-19 12:49 PM


hun this was hilarious! now all ya gotta do iwrite one about how ppl get hurt moshing and punk bands that would be a great poem hahaha! anyways this is like my 5 or 6 day withought sleep and i feel fine haha you can tell by my reply ;uohdghnsogfi ok i had to do that. well anywho talk to ya later babe. oh and jimmy to answer your question you asked me yes i do love you. lata *smooches jimmy* hehehe
robin

I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL!

MoeRocko
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7 posted 2001-06-19 01:49 PM


ooooooh someone likes the Backstreet Boys!   *snickers*

If there's a such thing as a Genius, then I'm one. If there's no such thing then I don't care...  ~John Lennon
  

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8 posted 2001-06-19 02:47 PM


Yea...don't diss on my favorite boy band  
haha


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9 posted 2001-06-19 05:18 PM


LOL!  This is very clever.  Hehe.. Thanks for sharing.  I needed to put a smile on my face..  

--Marie

"Imagine a pageant...
In my head the flesh seems thicker,
Sandpaper tears corrode the filth,
And I need you now somehow." --Silverchair

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