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WHiTePoNY
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0 posted 2001-06-18 11:27 AM


GOOD BAD HAPPY SAD,
THEY ALL SAY THAT I AM RAD,
BUT WHY DO I THINK I HATE HER DAD?
HE SEEMS LIKE A NICE GUY,
BUTI CANT LOOK HIM IN THE EYE,
I ALWAYS TRY BUY I THINK ILL DIE!
HER MUM HAS BEEN NAMED TORVIL,
NEVER GREATED BY HER WHEN I RING THE DOORBELL,
BUT MY GIRL SAYS SHE THINKS IM SWELL!
MNM! NO NOT THE RAPPER,
ALL SHE DOES IS TALK AND CHATTER,
BUT SHE SEEMS NICE NO MATTER!
THE DARK ANGEL IS THE ONE FOR ME,
I LOVE IT WHEN SHE KISSESS BEKKI,
AND WHEN SHE LAUGHS ALONG WITH ME!


[This message has been edited by WHiTePoNY (edited 06-18-2001).]

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thedarkangel
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1 posted 2001-06-18 11:32 AM


thankyou dan
a fantastic description of my family. especially my big gay dad! lol.
u daft monkey!
me
-x-

do what you do and do it well -ME!!!!

Ina
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2 posted 2001-06-18 11:46 AM


this was very intersting...in a good way
anonymous albert ?
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3 posted 2001-06-18 02:43 PM


different...but nice.

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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4 posted 2001-06-18 03:44 PM


Who's Bekki?

I thought the poem had a nice rythme to it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

angel_2401
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5 posted 2001-06-18 04:00 PM


Good, different from what I'm used to, but good.

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

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6 posted 2001-06-18 04:50 PM


Good work, I enjoyed the read and a bit different.
Zu

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7 posted 2001-06-19 02:12 AM


The rhyme scheme was pretty good... I liked this.  Nice work.

--Marie

"Imagine a pageant...
In my head the flesh seems thicker,
Sandpaper tears corrode the filth,
And I need you now somehow." --Silverchair

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