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Words_of_Glitter
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since 2000-10-25

Posts 90
USA

0 posted 2001-06-18 12:51 PM

When I saw you tonight, I felt...
Abolutely nothing.
And it was the oddest thing ever because last time I saw you, my heart sank to my ankles and wouldn't beat again until you walked away--out of my line of vision.
I expected a repeat performance and even held out my hands to catch my heart as it plummetted...
But it never moved.
It didn't even pause or skip a beat,
And my mind was working just fine, also.
Old memories of you (and me) surfaced and I could visualize it all so well.
But I could not seem to remember all the nights we stayed up talking...
All the beautiful things you said to me...
The long letters you'd write...
Or the way you made me feel like I was everything important in the world to you.
I guess my heart had finally realized all that my mind had known all along.
You never did anything special for me.
So when you show up at my doorstep and expect for my heart to fall into your hands,
The only thing you will catch is cold air as I blow off your words.

"Do not marry the one that you can live with. Marry the one you cannot live without."

Dr. Jo-Bizz
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since 2001-06-06

Posts 97

1 posted 2001-06-18 12:53 PM

wow... i really like the word imagery here.

dr. jo-bizz

But His word was in my heart
like a burning fire
Shut up in my bones;
I was weary of holding back,
And I could not.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-06-18 02:17 AM

Amazingly well done. I really liked the attitude given off in this poem. I really thought this poem rocked!
Hope to see more!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

3 posted 2001-06-18 02:45 AM

hey. i really liked this poem! i think it's something everybody can relate to when they fall out of love. i really hope to read more of your poems, thanks for posting :-)
-fear-

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

4 posted 2001-06-18 09:46 AM

I really enjoyed the read well done

Zu

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

5 posted 2001-06-18 02:34 PM

great poem...the imagery with your emtions worked well...i really liked this...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2001-06-19 01:32 AM

Wowers... these images are more than impressive. The last line was simply awesome. This poem rocks... Definitely a library piece. You portrayed everything perfectly here... the power you put into your words is just.. wow. I don't know else to say. I'm amazed! Excellent writing!
Very well done.

--Marie

"Imagine a pageant...
In my head the flesh seems thicker,
Sandpaper tears corrode the filth,
And I need you now somehow." --Silverchair

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

7 posted 2001-06-19 01:34 AM

Dagum, can't forget to click the dern button...

Hill's_Chatabox
Junior Member

since 2001-07-10

Posts 46
USA

8 posted 2001-07-13 10:31 AM

Chicka, I loved this Poem, I could some what realate to it, but not really.. I am glad that you are not going to let anyone hurt you or make you feel like you are worth nothing.. Because you are worth sooooooo much!!!!!, I have never had such a GREAT FRIEND as you. I hope no one ever makes you feel like you are worth nothing cause if they do, I'll be to prove them wrong....
Love ya!!!! Hill

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