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0 posted 2001-06-17 05:07 PM


I will let you fly,
Long and high in the purple sky.
Watching the stars fall like the snow,
My vocabulary does not have the word no.
They fall so gently, without a sound,
When they reach it, they light up the ground.
The sky is turning turquoise now,
And to you I make this vow.
I'll love you forever, I'll stay by your side,
With all my heart I promise to let you glide.
Up with the stars, kissing the sky,
You need your freedom and so you can fly.
The castles are gold,
I need to be bold.
To let you fly, to let you go,
I know you'll probably fly too low.
You don't have to come back, I give you my word,
You don't have to return, for you're now a free    bird.

© Copyright 2001 Rhonda Adolph - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-06-17 09:11 PM


I enjoyed this one. I liked the theme of it all. Beautiful job.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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2 posted 2001-06-18 04:43 AM


kool, *it's 3 in the morning so i think* hmmm just like the other one only ur saying it for the other person. yaaaaay lol.  sorry if this message is a bit retarded. i think i need some sleep. cool poem BTW.  later (or good night lol)
-fear-

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3 posted 2001-06-18 02:26 PM


great job!...i liked this poem as well...they both are very nicely written...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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