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WHiTePoNY
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0 posted 2001-06-17 04:40 PM


THE END
I MUST SEE
A KNIFE
I BLEED
ITS DOWN
TO ME!
BUT I CANT
BE SO
SELFISH
IM JUST
ANGRY AND
HELPLESS! ITS
EASY TO DO
BUT I COULDNT
GO THROUGH!
IF THIS IS YOU
THEN THINK
AND STOP IT
CAN WORK OUT
OBSERVE THE
CLOCK! TIME
USE IT WISE
NOT TO HATE
AND DISPISE
BUT TO LIVE
YOUR MESSED
UP LIVES



"Push back the square
Now that you need her but you don't
So there you go!
Cause back in school
We are the leaders of it all" - DEFTONES


[This message has been edited by Linc (edited 06-18-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-06-17 04:44 PM


Wow. I dont' know what to say. That hit really close to home. Hope things get better (and I know that eventually they wil).
Rhonda

"Who did that?" "Charlie and Blake." "Who's Charlie and Blake?" "Rhonda and Amy.""Great. There goes the school."

Linc
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2 posted 2001-06-18 10:51 AM


Hey,

     Wonderful poem, I like the style. Well I told you the rest in my email. Until your next poem

         -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

thedarkangel
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~*~the cutest~*~
3 posted 2001-06-18 11:16 AM


lol someone's been listening to linkin park! it's great babe, love u much.
me
-x-

do what you do and do it well -ME!!!!

angel_2401
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Cincinnati, OH
4 posted 2001-06-18 11:18 AM


Wow, that one really got me... I like it. Keep writing!

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

Ina
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5 posted 2001-06-18 11:19 AM


sounding like linkin park.
thiswas awesome

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6 posted 2001-06-18 02:38 PM


hit me to my heart!...awesoem job!...powerful...i really liked this poem  ...has been realated to...hope to see more...bye

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-18-2001).]

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7 posted 2001-06-18 03:42 PM


I enjoyed this one. Well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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8 posted 2001-06-18 04:49 PM


Good work, this was a good read
Zu

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9 posted 2001-06-19 02:04 AM


Awesome work.  I enjoyed this.  I like the style.  The way you did the lines made the breaks and pauses have added effect.. very creative.  I like this.  Good job.

--Marie

"Imagine a pageant...
In my head the flesh seems thicker,
Sandpaper tears corrode the filth,
And I need you now somehow." --Silverchair

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