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TrueLUV
Member

since 2000-07-19

Posts 158
Connecticut, U.S.A.

0 posted 2001-06-17 12:54 PM

You tell me how much you feel for me
But you don't show a bit of that when your with me
You kiss me softly, whispering sensually into my ear
Telling me that you want me and that you can't control youself with me
Always asking if I am worth it, quietly awaiting my reply
You say that love is what we make it
So what are we doing, should I tell you how I feel
If I should open my heart will you break it or should I do what I feel
Because you make me feel as if there could me no other
You say I make you misbehave
And that makes you feel bad yet make you look so good
Now I wonder how bad can you be
Will you break my heart or will you cherish it as if life depended on it
So now tell me that you love me and let's be alittle bad
Dance the night away let out all our energy and rest easy on our way home

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

1 posted 2001-06-17 01:28 PM

This was interssting. I dont like the meaning though.
good work!

Regina

If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-06-17 08:52 PM

Nice work. Not as good as some of the work I've seen from you. I always like to see yer name of the boards because I can expect something pertaining to real life....like, just true to itself. This had that, like yer other work, but lacked something that I can't put my finger on.
Anyhow, nice job.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-06-19 12:07 PM

I like this. Like Javi said, it's real. I can painfully relate to what this poem is saying. Nice work, I really enjoyed it.

--Marie

"Imagine a pageant...
In my head the flesh seems thicker,
Sandpaper tears corrode the filth,
And I need you now somehow." --Silverchair

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2001-06-19 09:57 AM

I like the poem....but not the title.....the title suggests something else altogether. It takes away from the poem. And the poem is better than that

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