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Crash&Burn
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since 2001-01-18

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0 posted 2001-06-17 12:37 PM

yes this is my first "love" poem I post here in passions and I really like it I hope you guys too. Anyways I wrote this poem hiding it's true meaning by putting one "easier," more like obvious, to find one the surface. So you could say this poem has two different edges, see if you can figure them out, enjoy...

The taste of Cherries:
Something sweet in your taste to wonder,
through confused sensation
and the extacy of power.
Glancing at your perfect body,
my sight becomes blurry
and I become weary
to see your face again.
Embrazed by our reality,
my true emotions show
I find my self at your mercy,
my love.

I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

anonymous albert ?

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1 posted 2001-06-17 01:08 AM

i think you did well on writing this...great job!...i enjoyed it...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Spice
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Resting in my cardboard box.

2 posted 2001-06-17 01:50 AM

OOOooo- I liked this one alot. Great write here Crash! Of course- the farting smilies at the bottom kinda took away they sweetness mood- LMAO. Anyway- You did well! Great first love poem post! Keep postin.

Dopey Dope

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since 2000-08-30

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3 posted 2001-06-17 03:24 AM

I liked this one jorge.....I'll have to tell you my interpretation of it behind the scenes, but this was a love poem well done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Crash&Burn
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since 2001-01-18

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4 posted 2001-06-17 12:02 PM

you know I also thought the fart thing kinda ruined it at the end but hey it's a good humor punchline, I'm glad you guys enjoyed but it seems no one has tried to intepret what I'm talking about in the poem :-(. Come on fellow poets I know you can do it!!

I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

Ina
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
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5 posted 2001-06-17 12:22 PM

ahhh my brain is fryed today... I liked it beaucoup. Ill come back another day and figure it out..

Regina

If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive.

Jenn Cirrincione

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6 posted 2001-06-17 10:21 PM

Honestly... my mind interpreted it not so nicely. LOL

I can't say what I thought here. But, the fact that it was a love poem I did understand very well...and that meaning is quite innocent and sweet!! I liked it a lot!

Jenn

"If my heart had wings, I would fly to you and lie.. beside you as you dream, if my heart had wings." Faith Hill

Crash&Burn
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since 2001-01-18

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7 posted 2001-06-17 11:06 PM

Jenn I'm glad to hear what you said because it seems you have figured me out :-)
Please know that I portrayed the theme in a beautiful and poetic manner, as it should always be in real life. I'm glad you like it and thanks for posting.

I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

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Lynchburg, Virginia

8 posted 2001-06-19 12:29 PM

The first four lines of this poem are absolutely amazing. This poem is very impressive. The beautiful words you've shared have hit hard... very hard. I enjoyed this poem. Keep sharing all your work with us.
Well done.

--Marie

"Imagine a pageant...
In my head the flesh seems thicker,
Sandpaper tears corrode the filth,
And I need you now somehow." --Silverchair

LoneWolf
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since 2001-03-10

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9 posted 2001-06-20 07:47 PM

wow this was beautiful. great job

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

Crash&Burn
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10 posted 2001-08-06 07:23 PM

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