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Spice
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0 posted 06-16-2001 02:10 AM       View Profile for Spice   Email Spice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Spice's Home Page   View IP for Spice

Finally, a free verse. Rhyming got old you guys- Sorry.    


Save your sob story.
I feel no sympathy for you.
You aren't the victim here.
Do you know what it's like for me?
Or even more, for her?
I can't even imagine what it's like to be her.
To constantly feel humiliated, ashamed.
All because of you.
I hate you.
How could you?
I cry everytime I see her sleeping.
Wondering what she is dreaming about and if I should wake her.
"What if they are nightmares," I think.
She's just a baby.
A baby you made feel different.
No apologies, no money, not even time can ever change that.
She has so many questions she wants to ask,
So many things she wants to say-
But she's afraid.
She's young, but she still understands.
She knows that this is affecting everyone
So she keeps quiet as to not upset anyone.
She tiptoes around all of us
When it's us that should be walking softly for her.
It amazes me how she isn't bitter.
How she still defends the pathetic-excuse-of-a-person that is you.
I guess thats the "heart of a child" though.
Always forgiving.
Lucky you.
Just remember...
I'm not a child.
And she won't always be.



You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

[This message has been edited by Spice (edited 06-16-2001).]

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1 posted 06-16-2001 02:27 AM       View Profile for anonymous albert ?   Email anonymous albert ?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymous albert ?

wow!...jess...this was a powerful and heartfelt poem...so much emotions were written here...and the message was a real one...i can realte...what you are saying...i personally...really liked this poem...and from a childs point of view...its like tears are cried w/out knowing...why?...etc...and those children grow up with unknown scars that leads to pain in teenage years...i've been there..i hope this person...you are talking about...is doing alright...and if you need someone to talk...feel free to email  ...bye

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2 posted 06-16-2001 03:44 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

Jessica, the raw emotion in this piece is absolutely amazing.  It's very true.  The ending is my favorite part.  It's true... things like this can affect children for years and years and they don't even have to know it.  This is a very well written poem.  Thanks for sharing it with us.

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Anorexic Beauty, feather-weight perfection.  Anorexic Beauty, underweight goddess." --Pulp

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3 posted 06-17-2001 03:01 AM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Jessica, the emotion and power in this one was simply mind blowing. I know what this is about and to even peer into your mind for a split second sends me off the planet with spasms of pleasure. I loved this one immensely. You really showed me how you felt, not only how you felt, but TRULY....how you TRULY feel about this whole situation.
I really enjoyed this as I enjoy all your work and I am excitingly awaiting more from you. *hugs*

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4 posted 06-17-2001 04:49 PM       View Profile for Skyfire   Email Skyfire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfire

Oh, WOW! Into my library! I am amazed. Truly amazed. What can I say? Wow!

Rhonda

"Who did that?" "Charlie and Blake." "Who's Charlie and Blake?" "Rhonda and Amy.""Great. There goes the school."

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5 posted 06-18-2001 01:04 AM       View Profile for cherish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherish

wow....what can i say...this is so awesome- you expressed yourself so well - and powerfully i must add....the situation sux yes but you told it well-it gave me goosebumps. keep posting...im becoming a fan..


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it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

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6 posted 06-18-2001 04:33 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

Great work Spice, I really enjoyed the read, well done  
Zu
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7 posted 06-20-2001 01:28 AM       View Profile for fearing-laughter   Email fearing-laughter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fearing-laughter

hey,
wow this poem kicked! i know EXACTLY what you're talking about in it.  this is a piece i would be really proud of if i were you.  great post! tis going in my library. thanks 4 the read.  bye bye.
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8 posted 06-20-2001 02:26 AM       View Profile for 5_sweet_kisses   Email 5_sweet_kisses   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for 5_sweet_kisses

OH my gursh I CAN SOOOO RELATE TO THIS!!! wow, keep up the great work... this is definately going into my library  

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9 posted 06-20-2001 02:32 AM       View Profile for Shygirl82   Email Shygirl82   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Shygirl82

Like everyone said...this was simply amazing.  There is no other way to describe it, the raw emotion and power just tug at you.  Hope things get better....
~Nikki~
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10 posted 06-20-2001 08:16 PM       View Profile for Spice   Email Spice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Spice's Home Page   View IP for Spice

Hey guys...
I just wanted to say a quick Thanks to all of you that have replied. I appreciate it.  Your words are encouraging....so Thankyou.  

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

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11 posted 06-24-2001 01:58 AM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

very powerful words Jess.  I just wonder who this is about.  thanks for sharing.  keep it up

hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

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12 posted 06-24-2001 07:06 PM       View Profile for DarkAngelOfTheStars   Email DarkAngelOfTheStars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DarkAngelOfTheStars

oh my *hugs* this was very good and sad...i hope everything is ok. i loved the poem!

one morning you wake up afraid you are going to live

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13 posted 07-01-2001 02:08 AM       View Profile for Spice   Email Spice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Spice's Home Page   View IP for Spice

Well Acire- The "she" in the poem is my little sister.
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14 posted 07-01-2001 02:23 AM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

thanks for clarifying that part

hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

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15 posted 07-01-2001 10:10 AM       View Profile for Spine Grinder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Spine Grinder

this was very thought provoking. i liked it.

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Don't belong, Don't exist, Don't give a S***, Don't ever judge me  -Slipknot

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16 posted 07-08-2001 06:15 AM       View Profile for Kicking Kim   Email Kicking Kim   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kicking Kim's Home Page   View IP for Kicking Kim

This was amazing.  I think it was giood that you left it as an unrhyming poem because it gave it its own sense of style.  Some poems are just best left without rhyme however others make it better.  This was truly great.  Keep writing!

  

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17 posted 09-07-2001 03:05 PM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Crap jesa...this is outstanding! You're really good at free verse and there is a ton of power behind this. You should be extremely proud of this piece for the story it tells is worth a thousand images.

Great job on this. Library here I come.  

~AF~

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18 posted 09-09-2001 02:10 AM       View Profile for Spice   Email Spice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Spice's Home Page   View IP for Spice

Oh Lizzy..
If you only knew the story behind this poem   Horrible...Reading it again made me cry...I had forgoten I had even posted this...And it's written in an old notebook so I haven't seen it since it has been posted.
Anyway, Thanks for the kind words, LOL- Though I don't appreciate you pulling up all the other old BS poems of mine. HaHaHa
I think I'll pay you back and pull up some of your older stuff...THat is, When I have time and it crosses my pea sized mind.  
Anyway, Thanks again.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

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19 posted 10-11-2001 05:38 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

just testing



hi Sweets ,  Lizzy ,  Jesa ,  Ina ,  Allysa ,  Marie ,  Cherish ,  Jenn ,  Chelsea ,  Leah ,  Kimmie

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