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Teen Poetry #4

What I Feel?

Julian L. Chester
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since 2001-06-05

Posts 50

0 posted 2001-06-15 08:58 PM

I feel a lot of ways.
Ways that I don't know how to explain.
Ways that I can imagine.
Ways that I wonder why I feel this way.
Ways that I ask myself stupid questions.
But can a question ever be stupid?
Well that is another story.
Ways that I wonder how can I stop
Myself from these feelings.
No matter what thoughs
Ways that I feel are,
I think of other ways and I feel other ways
From those ways.
But why,
Why can't I stop feeling the way that I do?
Can any body help me with what I feel?
I don't know but some of those ways
Are bad and some are good.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-06-16 01:52 AM

great job!...i can understand what you were trying to get with this...but your thoughts didnt end quite right...other then taht i liked this one

...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-16-2001).]

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2001-06-16 01:00 PM

No, questions can never be stupid

This is a good poem. Thanks for the good read.

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-06-16 06:41 PM

The word "ways" was overly used. I think it killed the poem in some senses....I liked it and it did provoke some nice thoughts though. Well done here!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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