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Master
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0 posted 2001-06-14 02:45 PM



To spend the New Year’s Eve together,
We hid away inside your room
And nothing in the world could matter
We stayed up staring at the moon.
The streets were painted in white,
Outside, the ashen flakes were swarming
And though we swore to break the night,
We shared one pillow by the morning.

© Copyright 2001 Andrey Kneller - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-06-14 05:06 PM


very nicely done!  
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2 posted 2001-06-14 05:57 PM


i liked this one as well...great work here ...bye

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3 posted 2001-06-14 06:22 PM


wow...short but sweet.  really powerful.  i really liked this one, thanks fer sharin it.  later
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4 posted 2001-06-14 06:45 PM


I like this poem! it's really cute!

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

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5 posted 2001-06-14 06:51 PM


I liked this one. Although it was short it was good. The ending was nice.
Jon

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Ina
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6 posted 2001-06-14 09:11 PM


short. very good work.
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7 posted 2001-06-15 03:34 AM


New Years Eve is the worst time of the year. Damn it to hell...

Anyway, your pieces are getting very simple but still hold that little magic you always have.

Good on you.  

~AF~

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8 posted 2001-06-15 08:54 AM


i REALLY liked this 1 alot ! good job and keep posting~

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9 posted 2001-06-16 03:03 PM


Very sweet poem. You wrote this well. A true display of what love can be like. I loved it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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