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keoni
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since 2000-10-16
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Up in the mountains in the NFC

0 posted 2001-06-14 11:24 AM



I don’t know what to write
To make this seem better
A tear comes with each word
I write in this letter
Baby I love you, through and through
But the time has come
Where I must leave you

The best times in my life
Have been with you by my side
Through the good times and the bad
You’ve held on for the ride
But things have been changing
More and more each day
We have grown apart
And gone our separate way

I’ve tried to talk to you
But the words don’t come out right
I was afraid that I would mess things up
So I’d try and leave your sight
When you can’t talk
Your relationship begins to fill with holes
We lost sight of each other
And moved on to other goals

They say that absence makes the love grow stronger
But they’ll be none left if we’re like this any longer
I know in time
We’re destined to meet again
If I’m the one for you
Over all the other men
I love you more than anything
And I have to let you know
This is the hardest thing I’ve ever done
But I have to let you go

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

© Copyright 2001 Jon - All Rights Reserved
the_rescue
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since 2001-05-23
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Japan
1 posted 2001-06-14 11:43 AM


WOW the poem was so awesome such feeling and emotion were involved in this it just well amazed me really I think yuo just topped yourself lol, that one really spoke you knwo what I mean well at least to me cause i have been in that situation before, but wow!

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with you
2 posted 2001-06-14 11:51 AM


I know how this feels from her point of view....I fell in love with my now husband when I was 14....we had to let each other go...life decided we had lessons we needed to learn away from each other.....well,   we are married now....been together for 7 years.....happy endings can happen... I hope all works out for you...this poem is fantastic    ~SEA
angel_2401
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since 2001-06-12
Posts 131
Cincinnati, OH
3 posted 2001-06-14 02:10 PM


Wow, I really like this one, it struck me. It's very emotional.  

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

stace_co2003
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In a dream world
4 posted 2001-06-14 02:32 PM


awwww *hugs* I liked it! it's goin in my library! keep it up!

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

stace_co2003
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In a dream world
5 posted 2001-06-14 02:34 PM


forgot to put it in my library!! heehee

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

Heaven won't have me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.

MoeRocko
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since 2001-04-25
Posts 166
West Virginia
6 posted 2001-06-14 02:43 PM


Nice Post! I Loved this One!
  AND no double replies unless you do the same for MoeRocko. Hehe jK   Once again. Very Nice      

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How do I know where to go when I don't know which way I'm facing

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7 posted 2001-06-14 05:55 PM


quite the emotional poem...i enjoyed this a lot and hope things get better ...bye Jon

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Ina
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since 2000-10-09
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Quebec, Canada
8 posted 2001-06-14 06:12 PM


Jon,
wow. this is amazing. Im putting it in my library.

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9 posted 2001-06-16 02:58 PM


Well done on this one Keoni. Not my favorite by you, but it was very well done. I felt it hit home. Nicely done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Shygirl82
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since 2001-02-19
Posts 245
Ilinois
10 posted 2001-07-07 01:33 AM


ok sorry I got to this one kinda late but I loved it alot and wanted it to go in my library.  This was simply beautiful..hope things work out for the best.
~Nikki~

It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them.

MindlessPoet
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since 2001-04-20
Posts 106
Texas
11 posted 2001-07-07 02:19 AM


Wow!  Awesome poem.  

*TiMMYBoY*
Yeah, that's me.  The Weird One.

Erin
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~Chicago~
12 posted 2001-08-14 01:09 AM


~Jon~
My dear friend I havent heard from you in ages and I am just looking through all your old poems. And this one just grabbed my attention with all it could. God I feel as if I have no words to say because this is something my boyfriend has been trying to tell me for so long but I just dont want to listen. I dont want to lose him. But you are so right when you say if you were meant to be yous will find each other again.

God I am so mad that I have been gone. Look how long ago you posted this. But Im not gonna be around alot work is getting hard. Im working 6 days a week now. I only have Sundays to sleep in. Well email me when you have time... Take care Buddy!!!

                                

"If you should die before me, ask if you could bring a friend."


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