I blew the best thing in my life.

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Hallucination
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since 2001-03-18

Posts 419

0 posted 2001-06-12 07:43 AM

I see you leave,
In slow motion over and over again
You pack your bag, look at me
And turn without a goodbye.
Walk out the door, scream your name,
But you are gone. every night I lye,
Awake and pray,
That I will someday, turn all my wrongs
Around.

I blew the best thing in my life
By hiding in a lie.
I know now that it wasn’t smart.
To start a big fight,
About something that small.
I blew the best thing in my life
On one single night.
How could I ever be that stupid.
To tell you these lies,
About something so fake.

Hear our memories,
Speak out loud through these four walls
Feel your pictures, silently breathe
Every time that I feel so cold.
Pick up the phone, thought you called,
But there’s no one. Every night I try,
To fall a sleep,
Really want to dream, turn all my wrongs
Around.

I blew the best thing in my life
By hiding in a lie.
I know now that it wasn’t smart.
To start a big fight,
About something that small.
I blew the best thing in my life
On one single night.
How could I ever be that stupid.
To tell you these lies,
About something so fake.

I blew it, I blew it bad,
Now I’m sitting here lonely and sad.
I blew it, I blew it so,
Now there is no tomorrow.
I blew it, I blew it good.
I only wish that I could,
Turn back time.

I blew the best thing in my life
By hiding in a lie.
I know now that it wasn’t smart.
To start a big fight,
About something that small.
I blew the best thing in my life
On one single night.
How could I ever be that stupid.
To tell you these lies,
About something so fake.

the_rescue
Member

since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

1 posted 2001-06-12 08:42 AM

wow man that really rocked I liked the end of it the repetition of the I blew it part that was awesome and I have done the same thing nice write.

in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN)

Dana Samples
Member

since 2001-04-07

Posts 68

2 posted 2001-06-12 01:56 PM

WOW!! i totally digged your poem. it so rocked. i too liked the repetition of the "i blew it" part. it added a little somethin to it. keep writin'. love- dana

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-06-12 05:29 PM

This was so sad.....geesh. Well I just hope it blows over and maybe you can work things out. Nonetheless this was a great poem!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

obscurity of cloud
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since 2001-05-11

Posts 294
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4 posted 2001-06-12 05:33 PM

This is so sad, but very well written. You've expressed yourself supremely.

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

5 posted 2001-06-12 10:35 PM

WOW!

*GREAT* Job, Hallucination!!!
I absolutely loved it.
I've felt the SAME way at times. It's a horrible feeling and I'm sorry. I hope things get better.

*Hugs*
Keep posting! You write amazingly.

Shygirl82
Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

6 posted 2001-06-13 04:46 AM

I thought this was a EXCELLENT poem. It was quite sad..but beautiful. I have felt the same way recently and it good to know that I am not the only one out there..... Hope things get better very soon...
Always,
~Nikki~

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

7 posted 2001-06-13 12:35 PM

That was really beautiful. I definately felt your emotions in that one! Way to go, and I REALLY hope things get worked out for you.
Rhonda

"Who did that?" "Charlie and Blake." "Who's Charlie and Blake?" "Rhonda and Amy.""Great. There goes the school."

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

8 posted 2001-06-13 02:21 PM

The repition read like a song for me. It was really good. I loved all of the wording you used. Great job, but it is a sad thing to live with...keep your head up.

Jenn

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