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fozzyozzy
Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

0 posted 2001-06-11 09:57 PM

The End

Be the one with the loudest mouth
Finish this quick
You should look away
The end has made me sick
   This nonstop spinning world has no end
(Neither fire nor Ice)
              Skips in time we end all the time
Its our duty (to end    Let somebody get the last laugh)

  Man made journey (the end)
  Two single lovers(the end)
  Reach the point  (the end)

Nothing can end me.  I can write forever
                     You can read me evermore
Burn this place to the ground so they can start over

I get the last word;laugh;cry;jump; and paycheck
     Look towards your end
         I look the other way         FuNNy
It's always rising(the sun)
if tomorrow wasn't another day, why do we have the moon

All your fears and convictions can be surpressed into a lie
But the fact remains you're crying because for you the day won't die
It's always a new phase every day
I forget where we were anyway
Frowns seem to stick to you
But what are you gonna do
Write me a poem, i'm your friend
Nothing can stop us except
The End.
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This doesn't seem complete. Funny because it's called "The End". Oh well maybe there will be a part 2

"This is cactus land!!!"-T.S.Eliot

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-06-12 01:53 AM

"if tomorrow wasn't another day, why do we have the moon"
GET OUT OF MY SITE!
I hate you and your brilliance! haha.
AWESOME line....I'm sorry but I loved it.
This poem rocked....it did need a little tid-bit more.....the conclusion seemed a bit less powerful than the rest, but nonetheless powerful enough.
Maybe a few more lines?
Still, AWESOME job here.....

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Linc

Senior Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

2 posted 2001-06-12 07:12 AM

Hey,

! This is really good I loved it

I hope to see more just like it. Until your next poem.

-- Line

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

the_rescue
Member

since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

3 posted 2001-06-12 08:45 AM

pretty good poem I like it kinda intresting way of doing it.

ps virginia rocks! lol

The Rescue

in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN)

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