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Shygirl82
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since 2001-02-19
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0 posted 2001-06-11 03:47 AM


After all the times you hurt me
The times you made me cry
Why do I forgive you, with every little sigh?

You look in my eyes...I forgive you
You place your hands upon me....I'm yours
What qualities could you possibly possess that make my vision blur?

You LIE again and again
You CHEAT-not always, but every now and then
You find nothing WRONG with the things that you do.
Well baby, let me tell you
I now SEE right through!

I woke up today
And I can now call you for what you truly are
A NO GOOD, LYING, CHEATING MAN-W****!!!!!!!!!!

[This message has been edited by Shygirl82 (edited 06-12-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Nikki - All Rights Reserved
fractal007
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1 posted 2001-06-11 03:50 AM


Whoa!  I don't think that the person this one is addressed to will live for much longer, lol.  Good job.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

anonymous albert ?
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2 posted 2001-06-11 04:15 AM


powerful and you should really give this poem fro the person youw rote about...i think he should know!...and are yous ure your a shygirl ...hehehe but great job on writing this...quite protayed powerful emotions here ...bye Nikki

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Ina
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since 2000-10-09
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3 posted 2001-06-11 10:06 AM


holy crap. that end woke me up ....hey i may not need the coffee this morning. Boys can be so not nice.  
DarkAngelOfTheStars
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4 posted 2001-06-11 03:12 PM


haha i loved it! esp. the end it was great!  nice job and good luck with them guys!

Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that

keoni
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Up in the mountains in the NFC
5 posted 2001-06-11 03:18 PM


Awesome! This was really hardcore, you should definately show this person the poem. It will knock him on his ass! I totally relate to this one, because the girls can just as easily do it to the guys.Let's put it this way- to hell with everyone who treats people that way.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Shygirl82
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Ilinois
6 posted 2001-06-11 05:00 PM


Thanks to everyone for replying...I dont really think this one of my best..but it definately made me feel better when I wrote it. And Keoni..I totally agree with what you said...
Thanks everyone!!!      
~Nikki~

Angelwings
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7 posted 2001-06-11 07:22 PM


Wonderful poem!!! The ending definately gave me a laugh!  I, too, think you should give this jerk the poem.  I love ya Nik and I'm always here for you!
Chez

*that what does not kill us makes us stronger!*

*Everyone can deal with pain in their own way, some things are just harder than others!*

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8 posted 2001-06-11 07:23 PM


Good vent out. I liked the poem, but do watch out with the W word  
It's a toughy around here.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

fozzyozzy
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since 2001-03-15
Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia
9 posted 2001-06-11 10:46 PM


As a man, I'm a bit scared .  I would never lie so I guess I'm safe.  Good poem way to slam the opposing side there.

"This is cactus land!!!"-T.S.Eliot

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