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Angelwings
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0 posted 2001-06-11 03:25 AM


Standing all alone
Feeling unguided
Surrounded by people
yet I'm lost in the crowd
Every person is different
Each with their own mind

People look past
things that are unknown

Did you see that little old
lady to the left?
Her grandson has cancer,
her daughter is pregnant,
she's one year away from
retiring with the one she loves.

Did you see that child that
brushed beside you?
She just lost her favorite bear,
her parents are fighting,
she got a new dog.

Did you see that hurried
man on his cell phone walk by?
He is on the verge of a big
sale at the office.
His wife is cheating on him
If he loses this client
he loses the job!

Did you see that little puppy
walk beneath your feet?
He's lost from his home,
missing the only place he's ever known,
he's hungry as he tramples
through the lonely streets,
he stumbles onto a bone
it'll be his food for tonight!

Did you see me as I hurried past?
Or were you to caught up in yourself?
I'm a little confused with the world today!
However, I got a raise!
My feelings were hurt
when I smiled at you
and you just walked by.

Do you see the world you are living in
or is it merely scenery
for the jumbled thing you call you're daily routine?

You see the lady you passed,
the man, the child, the dog, and me
are all part of who you are.

Perhaps you should stop to notice
the next to pass you by.


*that what does not kill us makes us stronger!*

*Everyone can deal with pain in their own way, some things are just harder than others!*

[This message has been edited by Angelwings (edited 06-11-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Chelsea Thompson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-06-11 03:31 AM


This was great! I really loved this one! It shows something I was reading the other day in a Leonardo DaVinci book .......He always felt that people were living without life......seeing without sight.......tasting without taste....and so on.
I felt that within this poem the tidious routine of an everyday life can just make you drown all the beauty within the simplicity of tasting a bagle, or, like in this poem, realizing what was around him.
I liked this poem a lot. very nicely done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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2 posted 2001-06-11 03:37 AM


this piece just has so much meaning behind it...i saw it as so many people living life in their own little worlds not able to see the world in their life...i truly loved this piece and the part where you wrote about the "dog"...wow!...it really hit home for me...amazming piece...deep...which i truly enjoyed...hope to see more!...bye Chelsea

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Shygirl82
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since 2001-02-19
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3 posted 2001-06-11 03:38 AM


Chelsea,
Loved it...
I really liked this one....and I know just how you feel..you know you can always come to me if you need a friendly face(unless I am at work...then you better wait)when you need someone to talk too.
Love you lots
~Nikki~

Ina
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4 posted 2001-06-11 10:35 AM


im under pressure. those replies were huge..ahhh...
ok well...here i go.
Your very right...i do it alot i just look likfe lately through glazed eyes, dazed. I used to wonder what and where and and all those questions, when i saw people walking across the street, or when i was eating. As the world i knew became more known, more familiar, i forgot all the simple things in life. Its quiet sad, how that happens alo. Maybe we don't dream enough anymore? Where did all the fantasy go in life? As more corruption, death, silly govnt official rule, our minds, our horizions become smaller and insignificant.

ok whoa....just wanted to say. amaizng work. definite library piece.

Regina

DarkAngelOfTheStars
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5 posted 2001-06-11 03:10 PM


i loved it great job!

Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that

SEA
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6 posted 2001-06-11 04:22 PM


Chelsea~ being a "people watcher" I tend to notice and wonder about, everyone I see...and those that I can't see.....I like this poem very very much....I think it's fantastic    ~SEA
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