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quietlydying
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the wonderful land of oz


0 posted 06-10-2001 03:50 AM       View Profile for quietlydying   Email quietlydying   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for quietlydying

an older piece of mine.

The mirror,
shattered,
leaves reminants of
Shiny, Slender Slivers
of glass
blanketing the floor.
Burrowing their way
into my tender flesh, so
ALIVE
it never ceases to bleed.
Venturing to the depths
of the
all too raw
soles
of my naked feet,
which bear the brunt of all.

- jen

© Copyright 2001 jennifer elizabeth - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 06-10-2001 04:11 AM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

I will honestly say that I loved this piece. You expressed the pain within this poem extremely well. Wonderful job.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

knightlyshadows
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2 posted 06-10-2001 02:20 PM       View Profile for knightlyshadows   Email knightlyshadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for knightlyshadows

yea i agree with javier......i liked this piece alot! im glad evy dragged u into joinin us here great work on this poem..and i cant wait to see more!
tiff

A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.

Where are you when i need you....?

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3 posted 06-14-2001 10:41 AM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

This piece tells a lot.  Very mush heart felt write.  Beautiful write.  keep sharing

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic

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4 posted 06-14-2001 11:39 AM       View Profile for the_rescue   Email the_rescue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_rescue

the poem was really good I like it alot and the imagery rocked

in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over.(SPOKEN)

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5 posted 06-14-2001 06:08 PM       View Profile for anonymous albert ?   Email anonymous albert ?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymous albert ?

awesome job on expressing this...i felted it ...great poem...hope to see more... bye

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6 posted 06-14-2001 09:19 PM       View Profile for Ina   Email Ina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ina

This was really good work. hope to see more
anonymousfemale
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7 posted 11-08-2002 11:49 PM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Jeez - holy crap. There is some stunning imagery throughout the piece that really does jolt you back to reality.
Glass - it's a bitch, isn't it?

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