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Ina
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since 10-09-2000
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Quebec, Canada


0 posted 06-09-2001 01:09 PM       View Profile for Ina   Email Ina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Ina



Let me go
leave your sunshine at the door
don't come in here
why do u want to torture yourself
Take your coat and leave
Do u see what i've turned into
don't remember me like this
go already!
Your not needed here anymore
Take your sunshine
bring your smiles to someone else
someone worth it
someone is not a disgrace
walk away...please don't run
Don't forget to smile for me once im gone
just smile and remember

Regina
© Copyright 2001 Regina Levy - All Rights Reserved
anonymous albert ?
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1 posted 06-09-2001 01:12 PM       View Profile for anonymous albert ?   Email anonymous albert ?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymous albert ?

i like the tone of this poem...and the two poems seem similar or is it just me ...you should make it a series ...i really liked it...bye ina

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

lonely*soul
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since 04-05-2001
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east haddam (moodus) ct :)


2 posted 06-09-2001 01:27 PM       View Profile for lonely*soul   Email lonely*soul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lonely*soul

yeah..those poems  do inda lead into one another...a series perhaps???
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3 posted 06-10-2001 01:02 AM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Nicely done here. I liked this one a lot regi! I like these poems yer putting out lately!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

fozzyozzy
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since 03-15-2001
Posts 348
Lessburg Virginia


4 posted 06-10-2001 01:06 AM       View Profile for fozzyozzy   Email fozzyozzy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit fozzyozzy's Home Page   View IP for fozzyozzy

Nice style. nice nice nice.  Nicely done  I really like this poem. I'm gonna check out the others

"This is cactus land!!!"-T.S.Eliot

anonymousfemale
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since 02-02-2000
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Limbo


5 posted 09-08-2001 04:19 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

The last two lines were the best in the entire piece. It's the finality of the situation that caught my eye.
Once again, great work. jeez...do you ever write crappy poetry?  

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

 
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