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MindlessPoet
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since 2001-04-20

Posts 106
Texas

0 posted 2001-06-09 03:01 AM

"A Little Piece of Me"

I feel like writing,
But I don't know what to write.
I feel like writing;
I don't even know why.

It seems for every answer I find,
Ten more questions arise.
I don't know what to think;
I'm surrounded by lies.

Lies and depression and sickness,
In body and in mind.
The greatest things in life
Can be the easiest to find.

But I alone don't know where to look;
I might as well be blind!
The only thing I find in my search
Is an old watermelon rind.

But that's okay;
I'm not used to the finer things in life.
I sit back in my easy chair
To try and forget about my strife.

But somehow it doesn't work.
Not that I thought it would.
Nothing ever seems to work out
The way you think it should.

But if for once something actually did,
I think I'd go insane.
Even my poetry sucks;
This rhyming is lame.

On and on
The world continues to turn
And on and on
The world continues to burn

Unknowing, it set itself ablaze.
With immorality, sickness, and lies.
And in its own time,
Everything dies.

*TiMMYBoY*
Yeah, that's me. The Weird One.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-06-09 03:17 AM

you told the your thoughtw ell in this one...i really liked the tone of this poem and the flow was nice also...great job!

...bye Tim

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Angelwings
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since 1999-08-27

Posts 222
IL, USA

2 posted 2001-06-09 04:00 AM

Wow! You really hit the nail on the head here. Sometimes it's reading someone else's work that makes something click inside your own mind. It's hard sometimes to work through everything when it doesn't seem to ever get better! Good job on this poem! Thank you for sharing it and good luck writing in the future!

*that what does not kill us makes us stronger!*

*Everyone can deal with pain in their own way, some things are just harder than others!*

mistic
Member

since 2001-05-06

Posts 233
Idaho, U.S.A.

3 posted 2001-06-09 01:06 PM

I really liked this one. I can't think of anything else to say though.... oh well i guess. it's good

Ina
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

4 posted 2001-06-09 01:11 PM

this was aweseome work.
Thats all i have to say.

Regina

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

5 posted 2001-06-09 03:10 PM

Wow.
I loved this one! This is probaly one of my favorites in PIP.

lonely*soul
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since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

6 posted 2001-06-09 03:11 PM

your poetry doesnt suck and the ryhming is NOT lame

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

7 posted 2001-06-10 01:36 AM

Well done here! I thought this was good. You had a point and really expressed it well!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

8 posted 2001-06-13 07:48 PM

I liked this one

Good job and i liked how you expressed your feelings.

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