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Godsend_1
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since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

0 posted 2001-06-08 07:58 PM

personally i think that one kinda sux but oh well enjoy

i am a constant
never changing
always here
never leaving
always near

i am a constant
not a variable
loving my people
as greatest friends
always close by

i am a constant
never gone

i am a constant
always here

i am a constant
changing never

i am a constant
forget confomity

i am a BEN
never gone

i am a BEN
here for you all

i am a BEN
never to far away
leaving you never

i am BEN
i am a constant
i am you

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be.
i always thought i was right here

DarkAngelOfTheStars
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 255

1 posted 2001-06-08 08:22 PM

aww this was cute nice job

made me smile

Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that

Evylyn
Junior Member

since 2001-06-04

Posts 20
Florida, USA

2 posted 2001-06-08 08:53 PM

Wow! Very "in your face" type of writing, I must say. *Loves it* Excellent piece. (If you consider this to suck, I wonder what your good poems would be...) ;oP

"The only thing that boggles the mind is the mind itself."

Dr. Jo-Bizz
Member

since 2001-06-06

Posts 97

3 posted 2001-06-08 11:53 PM

good use of repitition. aww.. my ben is cool... he's great. I think God is the only thing I could truly call a constant though... cause humans by their very nature are prone to failure at some point.

*hugs*

dr. jo-bizz

But His word was in my heart
like a burning fire
Shut up in my bones;
I was weary of holding back,
And I could not.

Godsend_1
Member

since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

4 posted 2001-06-09 12:17 PM

lol jo i aint talking about how i am a constant as in how i act i fail but i will always return and i will always be there for ya

glad ya like it all and i thank you for the kind words
ben redshaw the great out!!

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be.
i always thought i was right here

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

5 posted 2001-06-09 02:27 AM

Nice work Ben. Different but good in a lot of ways.

~AF~

Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!!

katherine
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since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

6 posted 2001-06-09 07:24 AM

hehe cute. i think...
and what do you mean this sucks i liked it.

fate can only take you so far, the rest is up to you

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

7 posted 2001-06-09 12:53 PM

I really liked this. Very honest piece. Great work Ben.

REgina

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

8 posted 2001-06-09 12:57 PM

this is ok..but i think its alil too choppy, and i know thats how its sopossed to be..but i dunno lol, but it makes sence!!!
*KiMMiE*

holatuwol
Member

since 2001-04-27

Posts 72
California, USA

9 posted 2001-06-09 05:44 PM

Okay... now this poem makes me continually think of my programming language class... all the mention of constants and variables and whatnot. --;  In another light, it reminds me of chemistry, which then leads off into all sorts of tangents which this poem seems to also lightly touch, though not in major depth...

Anyway, the major image of this poem when I was reading was turning moebius... x_X  Do not ask why I saw that image, I just saw it and I will not explain it beyond that. ^_^;;  However, I can see why you say the poem sucks... the words are powerful, but the emotion that seems to drive them is somewhat weak and I could barely detect it...

The words were strong in essence, but I didn't feel that different after reading it. ^^;  The impact seemed to be so light and faint as compared to your other ones, and so I put this one pretty close to the bottom of my list of your poems... the ones you wrote awhile ago were better... this one just doesn't really compare. ^_^

I still thought it was good... just not as good as some of your others. ^_^  hehehe  Until next time...

- holatuwol

never_a_princess
Member

since 2001-06-09

Posts 82
Show Me the Money

10 posted 2001-06-09 10:15 PM

heya mr. bennerz~
haha..it does NOT suck..not one o' the best but not terrible..anyways..look at my dimented cat icon! *YaY* lol..ok, i'm done now..*hugz and junk*
~yeah, you know who this is, so...bye-bye *waves*

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

11 posted 2001-06-10 12:09 PM

I really didn't think the last line made any sense.......you are me? huh? Can you explain that.....if you are constantly BEN....how can you be ME aswell.....wouldn't that shift who you are and thus defy the whole idea of being constant? Unless you are saying you are constantly ME AND YOU, and if you mean "YOU" as a whole and not "Me" as an individual then you're obviously implying "YOU" as a general identification. So...BEN IS CONSTANTLY EVERYBODY....is that it?

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Godsend_1
Member

since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

12 posted 2001-06-10 01:33 AM

ok ya kinda got it jav the last line means this to me at least yall can see it as you wish the poem is about me but its also about being an individual and when i say i am you i mean that everyone is a "ben" cuz i mean ben not as me but as a person who doesnt change a person who is there for the friends and stuff ya get it i know its kinda out ther ebut oh well

ben redshaw the great out!!

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be.
i always thought i was right here

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

13 posted 2001-06-15 07:11 AM

i thought this poem was cute although i dont think anyone or anything is truely constant..or atleast not with my experiences. Cute poem tho

the_rescue
Member

since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

14 posted 2001-06-15 09:23 AM

nice write man good job that's basically me too, I may fall for a bit but I'm always back up and in your face lol so to speak.

in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN)

MoeRocko
Member

since 2001-04-25

Posts 166
West Virginia

15 posted 2001-06-15 04:28 PM

Ben, this SUCKED so Bad! I don't even know why you're in this club. HaHa Great post Benji. Your Pal, Ewok

Will It matter in the end?

Fall mountains, just don't fall on me.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

16 posted 2001-06-20 10:25 AM

This is a good read. powerful piece and thoughts. keep it up

hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

17 posted 2001-06-21 03:47 AM

Woah, kick butt......I actually semi-got it!
GOooooooooo me!!!
*does the happy dance*

well now that I know the meaning as you explained it...I like the meaning. Well done here!

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

18 posted 2001-06-21 03:55 AM

lol javi you're so funny! my ben!!!!!!! me lovers you! you my budy! i likes! good poem!
robin

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