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Spice
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0 posted 06-08-2001 04:09 PM       View Profile for Spice   Email Spice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Spice's Home Page   View IP for Spice

Okay. It's been a lil tiny bit since I've posted last. This one is just a lil playful thing I guess...Nothing serious, nothing great at all, just somehting that popped out in 3 minutes and I thought was a perfect example of me.     Enjoy. Oh- And title help please!


Look at us. How old are we?
We are acting as if we are three.
This isn't very becoming of your or me.
Can't we just forgive and let it be?

These hateful glances, that mean stare.
This hostility that has been filling the air.
What happened to the love we used to share?
What happened to us-To the way we used to care?

Follow my lead, I can fix it, I promise.
"Baby I want you to know I'm sorry for all this.
Your jokes, your love, I'm beginning to miss."
Now then, theres the lines- Go Practice!    

Don't look at me like that. You knew I wouldn't apologize for it.
I mean come on, be honest, you started it-Just admit!
You can change the words or something- I'll let you do your own little edit.
But remember, you aren't leaving until you say it, so just sit down for a bit.


[This message has been edited by Spice (edited 06-09-2001).]

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1 posted 06-08-2001 04:28 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

I see a little fighting here  
Everyone acts like little kids once in a while
Hope you solve your problems
Nice to see you posting again Spicey
Hope to see more in the future
Thanks for the marvelous read
Keep sharing

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michel

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2 posted 06-08-2001 04:31 PM       View Profile for anonymous albert ?   Email anonymous albert ?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymous albert ?

b.bu...but...3 minutes ...whoaa...it took me 10 to just read it...well...goo goo ga ga ...ahhhhhh ...ok?...but for reals...you expressed this situation well...your feelings were nicely protrayed and i hope everything turns out the best for you ...i liked it and im really glad you are posting your poems and giving us...once more of your...ummmm "your grace"....well hope to see more...bye jessica

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3 posted 06-08-2001 11:45 PM       View Profile for stace_co2003   Email stace_co2003   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit stace_co2003's Home Page   View IP for stace_co2003

hey, I like this!!

but hey, where's Dopes. he normally replies to stuff before I do. I miss the guy, and I don't know if he's even gone!!!!

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

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4 posted 06-09-2001 12:16 AM       View Profile for Spice   Email Spice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Spice's Home Page   View IP for Spice

Thanks for the replies PPL. Mua!

ANYWAY- I don't think Javier has easy access to a comp at the moment. He does most of his net time when he goes to visit his parents I think....I'm not sure though...You can't keep him from this place long- Give the lil guy some time and you can yell at him personally for being gone.  

[This message has been edited by Spice (edited 06-09-2001).]

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5 posted 06-09-2001 12:36 AM       View Profile for Dr. Jo-Bizz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr. Jo-Bizz

good job...  I guess I always like the rhyming kinds... geez.  I feel stupid replying to poetry sometimes... cause I dont know any of the terminology so i'm just kinda like... durrrr... i-liked-it-but-i-dont-know-why... sorry.  I do try.  

dr. jo-bizz

But His word was in my heart
like a burning fire
Shut up in my bones;
I was weary of holding back,
And I could not.

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6 posted 06-10-2001 12:01 AM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Yea, you are right....I was away from my parents for 3 days. No access to a comp, my bad. Jess, whoever this poem is about it sucks. I can see how these two people might just be hard headed and not say sorry even though they both readily might want to.
I hope all goes well with the situation.
Keep posting, I love and adore your work!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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7 posted 09-08-2001 04:17 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Hey Jesa

But...being immature is FUN!!! *dances*  
Good piece but not quite as good as the others you have written. All the same you still have expressed yourself well and I hope the situation improved for you.

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

 
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