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Teen Poetry #4

Theres nothing there

Shyan
Junior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 10
Canada

0 posted 2001-06-08 02:04 PM

ALright, I think this ones just a lil better than the one I put up last night. So enjoy it.

Theres nothing there
If you look in her eyes
Her soul is slowly wasting away
Can any one help her?
No one understands
Whats in that girls heart and mind
Things impossible
Whats left of her
Is being torn apart
Piece by piece
Tears flow
But no one sees
Her heart is broken
Scarred and torn
Its all she holds dear
As she waits
For the savages of the world
To take the rest of her soul.

stace_co2003
Member

since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

1 posted 2001-06-08 03:04 PM

I really like this poem. why? cuz I can really relate to it........

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

the_rescue
Member

since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

2 posted 2001-06-08 03:19 PM

good job I liked the poem as I said to someone before I really like the short lines I can't seem to do that for some reason lol.

in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over. (SPOKEN)

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-06-08 04:38 PM

great job

...very true...i liked it...cuz thats exactly how i feel...bye Shyan

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-06-09 07:22 PM

Eeeeeeeeek....the ending was scary. Well not scary but .....well yea scary. It was written wonderfully. I really liked the ending to this one. Great job!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-06-12 10:55 AM

Why wait...fight back!!! You need to stand up and fight every obstacle that goes you way. be strong

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic

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