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PiXiEpUnKeR
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since 2001-06-06

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IL, USA

0 posted 2001-06-08 12:15 PM

Sometimes I feel happiness
outside in the air
free-falling from the world
bothered by no one

Sometimes I feel anger
want to scream, want to kick
"those stupid boys"
(they can't understand me)

Sometimes I feel butterflies
is it love?
I can't call it love, until I know it's love
I don't want to come out of it

Sometimes I feel sickness
like a bat to the stomach
I lay there gripping where it hurts
"why me? why me?"

Sometimes I feel the space
the distance between two crossed hearts
I try to mend them back together
tears keep them apart,
a slipping friction moving them

Sometimes I feel bliss
thinking of your face, your kiss
the music, the freedom!
ah, sometimes I feel such bliss

Sometimes I miss myself
I travel so far into the other world
floating, and dreaming
please pull me back!

Sometimes I feel you
I feel our touch, our love
I grip it and hold it tight
dont make me let go...

Sometimes I feel words
they hurt, they sting
or they calm, and love
they circle around like a jumbled tornado

Sometimes I feel pain
"damn", I say
"not this again"
(but it still remembers to haunt me)

Sometimes I feel life!
I feel the birds swooping down near me
I feel birth! I feel a new heartbeating!
I take it all in,
and push out whatever else I feel

[This message has been edited by PiXiEpUnKeR (edited 06-08-2001).]

the_rescue
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since 2001-05-23

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Japan

1 posted 2001-06-08 12:26 PM

Alright that was really good I liked the repetition of the sometimes I feel and the descriptions of the emotions and such I really like the part about missing yourself.

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DarkAngelOfTheStars
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since 2001-04-21

Posts 255

2 posted 2001-06-08 08:30 PM

i liked it! i really liked the part about another world great job hun keep it up!

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PiXiEpUnKeR
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since 2001-06-06

Posts 49
IL, USA

3 posted 2001-06-08 08:32 PM

THANKS ALOT GUYS... BUT PLEASE DONT STOP HERE... CHECK OUT MY OTHER POSTS PLEASE!

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

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4 posted 2001-06-08 08:39 PM

I'm with Rescue- I liked the missing myself part best. Great read! Keep writing.

n e where
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since 2001-05-30

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5 posted 2001-06-08 09:09 PM

i really enjoyed this poem
good stuff

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6 posted 2001-06-10 12:31 PM

This was nice. I liked it a lot!

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I admire it daily

fozzyozzy
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since 2001-03-15

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7 posted 2001-06-10 01:03 AM

Whoa. I like this alot. and I mean alot. Good job. The repetition fit into a sort of theme from my POV. Excellent piece. into me library

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8 posted 2001-06-15 07:08 AM

Feelings are extremely powerful and you expressed that well here...i liked it

Spine Grinder
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9 posted 2001-06-15 08:52 AM

i really liked this 1! it haad good meaning! thanks for the read!

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10 posted 2001-06-20 10:23 AM

This was a good read, thanks for sharing

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Raven Skye
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since 2001-03-03

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11 posted 2001-06-20 12:31 PM

I had a "sometimes I feel" poem. These types of poems rock! My therapist says that poems that start off with "Sometimes I feel" or "I feel" really help express everything that you are feeling. I think your way of expressing your feelings about things is beautiful. Keep up the awesome work.

I'm adding you to my list...

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Jenn Cirrincione

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12 posted 2001-06-20 01:33 PM

Very good! So emotional and real. Keep em coming, I promise I'll try and read em all.

Jenn

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Heavens Tears

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13 posted 2001-06-20 02:15 PM

Great poem. This is the first of yours that I have read, and I look forward to seeing more, so keep it up!!

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LoneWolf
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14 posted 2001-06-20 07:23 PM

i liked this. great job

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