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Heavens Tears
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0 posted 2001-06-07 09:43 AM


Dont look back
To lost memories
To those forgotten tears
And painful scraped knees

Dont hold back
You have to break free
But if you cant let go
You'll forever be

Just like you are now
Only thinking of the tears
Thinking of the heartbreak
Reliving the painful years

So dont look back
To lost memories
To those forgotten tears
And painful scraped knees

*~*Amanda*~*

My tears roll right down my cheeks, but they all soak into my pillow.  I feel kinda sorry for it...

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1 posted 2001-06-07 09:54 AM


Interesting piece.  I thought it was well written.  You cant look back you have to look forward all the time.  Keep writing.

Chel

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2 posted 2001-06-07 10:24 AM


This is very nice. I liked it. I thought it had a good message, and it flowed quite nice. Good Job.
Jon

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3 posted 2001-06-07 09:41 PM


very nice job its hard not to look back and feel the pain over and over again....but it is better when we just move on....even though its hard and i hardly ever do....lol  

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4 posted 2001-06-09 07:55 PM


Nicely said here! I enjoyed this poem. I thought you wrote this well! Watch it for the busted knees....ouchies....yep yep.
Hope to see more soon!

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5 posted 2001-06-09 10:15 PM


I like this a lot!! especially the ironic ending LOL    
but keep in mind if you don't keep the past in mind, you'll make the same mistakes over again so...  you should always be looking ahead but keeping the past in the back of your mind! just my perspective *L*

Valerie

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6 posted 2001-06-09 10:46 PM


teh images made your feeling more well told...i liked it...great job!...bye Amanda

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7 posted 2001-06-12 03:03 PM


interesting way to look at things though i believe you have to look back to your past to be able to move forward into the future.  wel done Amanda.  keep sharing

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8 posted 2001-06-13 12:11 PM


Hey that was cool!  I like that one a lot! (Again, I knew I came here for a reason today!) That actually helped me out a lot... Into the library!

Rhonda  

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9 posted 2001-06-18 11:45 PM


I completely agree with your message but unfortunately i dont practice what i preach because im constantly looking back...i practically live in the past lol I think its become a habit. Nice poem tho   i really liked it!
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