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PiXiEpUnKeR Junior Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 49IL, USA |
Tangled fingers laughing faces exchanging whispers in wide open spaces Blushing cheeks caressed Lips wiping away any tears that slip Together again a reunion long kept hours to make up for the hours we've wept Everlasting love surviving souls a bong stronger then anyone can know Giggling voices holding tight pain relieved with a well deserved night No one can touch us relaxation and rest together forever here comes the best |
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HVNsnt82086 Junior Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 30United States |
AWW! This is so sweet, I want to cry! The poem is so beautiful, and shows such emotion! Great work!! "So when you feel like hope is gone, look inside you and be strong, and you'll finally see the truth...that a hero lies in you." *~Mariah Carey- Hero~ |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked this a lot...very sweet  ...bye  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
wow this is a great poem!...i loved the short rhyming sentencese..it made me read it really really fast and sweet...hahha...it had great rythm..very sweet i enjoyed it a lot...more punk more!! |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
nice job! i loved it!! Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one. great job here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
beautiful write. Thanks for the read and keep sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
Very sweet poem. I liked a lot of your phrasing, but the very last line seemed a little awkward. Overall--wonderful work! "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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Wood_Stock Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 58The little yellow |
"Awwww, how sweet" "nice, I like this one" "It was really good" blah blah blah.... You know guys, those messages are nice and all, but one can't help but feel you have a automated responce button or something. Maybe it's just me, I dunno. But onto more pressing matters... heh... I've just come back to the site, and I was looking at my past responses, and you asked me to have a look at some of your stuff... and I've perused a few of them, and I must say, for the most part I really liked what I've read. But this is my favorite. So I figured I save you the hassel of reading the likes of the above quotes and say it all here. It was indeed a lovely poem, and one that I can relate to (well I think I can anyway). Keep posting, you have a talent. And I'm not one to just say that. (WOW, how pompus do I sound??!! heh heh.) Check out some of my stuff if you have the time. Wood_Stock. |
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MindlessPoet Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 106Texas |
I really liked the last stanza hehe*TiMMYBoY* |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
YAYAYAYAY!!! Love and sweet things!! So glad to hear stuff like this. Nice work on it!! Hope you two are still very happy.Jenn "Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill |
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