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quitstaringatmenow
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0 posted 2001-06-06 01:21 PM



He found out my secret,
He knows now.
I cannot believe it.
It slipped out somehow.

It could have been perfect,
I would have been pretty.
He took it away.
Now I'll never be skinny.

I know maybe
it's not too wise.
But this predisposed defeat
Marked my spirits demise.

You snatched up my hope
Stole all my dreams
Ripped beautiful visions
By their sweet seams.

Now you will pay,
Now I'll just lie.
I won't even pretend
To hear your fake cry.

You can't seperate
me and my best friend.
Ana; my secret mate-
Until the end.

Love comes and goes
Some true friends stay
But as long as I want her
You can't take her away.

(This poem was about my boyfriend finding out I was anorexic)

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the_rescue
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1 posted 2001-06-06 01:30 PM


powerful words in your poem it was really good hey WELCOME to Passions hope to read some more of your stuff.

ps  true beauty lies within, and nothing can crush it or deface it.

in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over.  (SPOKEN)

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2 posted 2001-06-06 01:34 PM


WOW! Welcome! Glad to have you with us...look forward to seeing more from you   ~SEA
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3 posted 2001-06-06 01:42 PM


   WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!!!!!!!!!!    

Loved the first post and i cant wait to see more from you! I am glad to have you aboard and hope you enjoy it here as much as the rest of us    

[This message has been edited by xShUgArHiGhx (edited 06-06-2001).]

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4 posted 2001-06-06 01:43 PM


omg this was sad! i hope you get stronger! just remeber you are who you are and that's all you can be!
robin

I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL!

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5 posted 2001-06-06 04:31 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS ...this was  a nice first post...i enjoyed the read...hope to see you read,share and reply  ...bye

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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6 posted 2001-06-06 04:37 PM


A wonderful first post.  Writing will help make you strong, fight the images others put up as examples and seek within yourself for strength.  Words have a way of releasing the souls sadness!

Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...

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7 posted 2001-06-06 05:18 PM


You wrote this poem well! I liked it a lot but I urge you to seek help. Ana kills.
Welcome to Passions! Hope to see you around more.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Isabel Galaxia
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8 posted 2001-06-06 07:52 PM


Hey, I just wrote a poem about this, (called Ana).  My boyfriend found out a while ago, well, I mean, I don't KNOW I've never been to a dr about it and all..if you know what I mean.  It tore him apart, I felt so bad for him, and for telling him.  I've been this way since about last March, he's known for about a year.  We don't talk about it.  If I try he gets quiet and defensive.  I know what you're goin thru.  If you need to talk lemme know
Bel

"And you're my obsession
I love you to the bones
And Ana wrecks your life
Like an anorexia life"
- "Ana's Song", Silverchair

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9 posted 2001-06-06 08:08 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

Beautiful poem. very expressive.  Seems like you'd fit in perfectly.  Nice to see join us here in Passions for Poetry.  Hope you enjoy reading and sharing your won work as well.  

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michel

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10 posted 2001-06-06 09:34 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!!


i loved the way you portrayed what you are going through in this poem..a lot of girls  suffer at the hands of anorexia which is really very sad...youve put up a great first post...youve got real talent!..i hope to read more of what youve got..more says i!!
enjoy your stay here..and if you need sumone to talk to feel free to email me..

fozzyozzy
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11 posted 2001-06-06 10:10 PM


just imagine this welcome with smileys everywhere...ok done?  Great first post.  Made me think about one of my friends who used to have anorexia nervosa.  Wilkommen

"This is cactus land!!!"-T.S.Eliot

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12 posted 2001-06-06 10:22 PM


wow.  that was really great.  I mean, not great that you are struggling like that, but a good peom.  my sister was bullemic.  sucks out loud.  take care

dr. jo-bizz

But His word was in my heart
like a burning fire
Shut up in my bones;
I was weary of holding back,
And I could not.

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13 posted 2001-06-07 09:30 AM


Hey.  First of all, welcome to Passions.  Second, I just want to say that if you ever need someone to talk to, please email me.  I have suffered from both anorexia and bulimia, which unfortunately I still do.  Getting help is hard.  I still havent but I do know that talking helps ALOT.  Keep you head up chick.  

*~*Amanda*~*

My tears roll right down my cheeks, but they all soak into my pillow.  I feel kinda sorry for it...

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14 posted 2001-06-16 03:04 PM


Welcome to Passions.
Very powerful first post.  Keep writing about it... it always helps.  Words have a way of healing.  I'm glad you shared this poem with us.  I'm looking forward to reading more.  So keep posting all your work.
Well done.

--Marie

"You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced.
Anorexic Beauty, feather-weight perfection.  Anorexic Beauty, underweight goddess." --Pulp

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