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fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

0 posted 2001-06-04 01:20 AM

hi hi...i don't really like this poem i just wanted 2 post somethin. tell me what you think, and be honest. thanks! :-)

sorrow overwhelms me
as i gaze into your eyes
i know it's over
but i still can't help from asking why
why don't u care that i'm sittin here lost?
did you ever care?
and for that matter why exactly did i?
i knew you'd end up hurting me...
scarring me on the inside
but yet i let myself fall
fall into your eyes
the eyes of an angel
angel in disguise
the eyes of my life

-fear-

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

1 posted 2001-06-04 01:24 AM

scarring me on the inside....
i loved the imagery you used in this short but sufficently "sweet" poem..you may not like it but i think youve done an adequate enough job ini portraying your feeelings...well done!!..hope to read more from you soon!!

bye bye bye!!

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-06-04 02:55 AM

This poem was really emotional. Sometimes we just end up falling for the wrong people. I hope time heals your wounds. Wonderful job here.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-06-04 03:16 AM

very emotional poem...and i loved the last verses...beautiful job

...hope to see more...bye

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2001-06-04 07:01 PM

I thought this was very good

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-06-08 10:59 AM

I honestly believe that this is a very well written poem. Why you don't like it, I cannot seem to understand. You did really good. keep sharing

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michel

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

6 posted 2001-06-11 06:37 AM

I enjoyed it..i dont think it was bad at all! Nice topic...full of emotion...good job hun

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

7 posted 2001-06-11 10:01 AM

(sniff)

Boys....lol. Im well....guys come in and out our lives. sometimes we fall hard. sometimes its just their bodies....
But i really hope you keep your head up.
all will be well.

Regina

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