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CwboyAtHeart
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0 posted 2001-06-04 01:04 AM


I wrote this one quite a while back, probably a year or so.  It's defiitely not one of my best, but  figured I'd post since it's been a few days. Anyway, here it is, let me know how it sounds.  (My pic should be over on the side there, too.  Bad pic, but oh well.)


...THERE THEY GO

If you feel somehow
Abou someone
And were about to let it out
But you blinked your eyes
...There they go

If you feel that way now
You've got to let them know
Because the next thing you know
They could be gone
...There they go

If you don't tell them now
Maybe you never will
Your mind is with your soul
The two of them don't part
...There they go

You never spoke
Your soul went up in smoke
They never knew how you felt
Your soul feels like it's going to melt
...There they've gone.

© Copyright 2001 C.K.N. - All Rights Reserved
cherish
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1 posted 2001-06-04 01:07 AM


awwwwwwwwww..made me feel like crying cody!!
..great poem..i loved the repitition of there they go and the conclusion...good stuff matey!!!
btw nice pic!!....it just makes me feel even colder then i already am..hehehe..thanks for the read!




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it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

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2 posted 2001-06-04 02:52 AM


Great poem!! I liked it..so nice.
And the pic......heyyyyyyyy it's youuu!
Sup man!
Hope to see more!

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I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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3 posted 2001-06-04 03:19 AM


great poem...i enjoyed it...sooo thats the person behind the "howdy" ...keep writing cody...bye

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4 posted 2001-06-04 07:11 PM


I liked the poem and it's a nice picture  
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5 posted 2001-06-05 12:07 PM


i loved it!  kepp smiling hunny   and you shouldn't say your pic is bad   i think your a cutie!

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6 posted 2001-06-08 11:44 AM


True words of wisdom  
Don't let the moment pass you by
beautiful write
keep sharing

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7 posted 2001-06-11 11:43 AM


ooo i liked this   nice job!
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