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Demi
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0 posted 2001-06-02 05:04 PM


hey, this is one of my more recent poems.  i was kinda talked into posting so tell me what you think if you wanna.

Darkness of Time

time stops.
a gentle soul wanders through his own reflection.
wanting to rest, but knowing that he never can.
darkness engulfs his being.
steely daggers sear through his flesh.
a burning fire fills his eyes.
the darkness calls with a blackening howl,
consuming light as it winds to him.
a burning coldness enters as mirrors shatter.
sobbing, a sound of weakness, escapes his lips.
he lies on jagged shards, bleeding.
a thousand mocking eyes look on from the darkness.
and as he reaches for help in the dark,
a cold hand tosses it aside.
darkness engulfs all.
the man lies no more.
a distant howl is all that remains,
of a memory of a man.


© Copyright 2001 Demi - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-06-02 05:21 PM


Welcome to Passions! I enjoyed this poem greatly. It had some sort of creepy feeling in the end, and I enjoyed that very much. The ending is superb. I loved it.
I hope you like it here and reply and post more in the future.

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I admire it daily

Meggie1986
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2 posted 2001-06-02 05:58 PM


Welcome!  Wow, this was a great poem.  I look forward to seeing more of your work!

*One meets his destiny often in the road he takes to avoid it.

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3 posted 2001-06-02 07:05 PM


WeLcOmE tO pAsSiOns!!!!!!!.........

Grreeeeeat first post!!! I cant wait to see more from you   Keep those poems comin hun...i really enjoyed this one  

Isabel Galaxia
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4 posted 2001-06-02 10:49 PM


wow! Great first post.  Hope to see more from you
Welcome

Bel

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5 posted 2001-06-02 11:36 PM


welcome to passions...

a very nice first post...you had some great images which reverberated in my mind...

write on!!

Tiersdin
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6 posted 2001-06-03 01:09 PM


Fantastic post, Demi, I'm looking forward to reading more!  *wink*

~Tier

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7 posted 2001-06-03 01:24 PM


Welcome to Passions Demi, great first post hope to read more of your work soon  
Zu

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8 posted 2001-06-08 10:02 PM


this is a really good first post...(compared to mine which sucked)...and I hope to read more from you soon  

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

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9 posted 2001-06-08 10:05 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!! ...thia was very nice first post...i realted to it quit a bit...great job! ...hope to see more...bye Demi

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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10 posted 2001-06-09 12:29 PM


Welcome to PIP! That was an excellent poem. Keep posting!  
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11 posted 2001-06-16 02:58 PM


Welcome to pipTalk.  Very nice first post!  I enjoyed the read.  I can't wait to read more posts and replies from you.  Well done.

--Marie

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