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This Vacation |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
I'm gonna miss you, this long vacation. First off, I don't even know, your location. I hate not being, by your side. Without your love, I wanna hide. Your leaving me, this just cannot be. I ask you to stay, in a small little plea. Please stay here with me, don't just go. Just stay here, and let our love flow. Oh No! your leaving. Now that you've gone, i'm now grieving. I'm so sad, now that your not here. Will you come, and dry my tear? fall hard, practice harder not to fall |
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ethel lahootie Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 143SC, USA |
wel im sad to say that i can relate to this. hope things get better for u. good job w/the poem  ~eThEl  ~ |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Nice poem. You've conveyed your emotions rather well. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this is sad...and you expressed these emotions quite well  ...i enjoyed the poem...as i hope things get better...bye  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very sad, but the ending rocked. I liked this one a lot. I know how it is to not know what's going on....just feel complete sadness. I liked it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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