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Now That You're Gone
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Now That You're Gone |
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Hidden Junior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 18Lost in my own world |
Now That You're Gone Now that you're gone And not in my arms My moon doesn't shine Quite as bright Now that you're gone And not by my side I don't ever laugh Qutie as loud Now that you're gone And not holding my hand My world doesn't seem Quite as right Now that you're gone And I'm all alone My heart hasn't been Quite as warm Now that you're gone You're still in my heart But I still don't feel Quite as loved. **One of the most adventurous things left for us is to go to sleep. For no one can lay a hand on our dreams.** |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
awww, sweetie...give it some time.  I like your poem. the flow was great, and I read it much like a song.  Stace I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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~*brittt*~ Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 76East Haddam, CT |
All your poems I have read are so good.I liked this one alot. ~britt~ |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I LOVED this one. So straight forward, but deep. Your conclusion rocked. i really loved the ending in this poem. I know exactly how this feels. It's as if you stole the thoughts from my mind. Well done....awesome joB!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
awesome poem...the repition worked well...quite deep  ...i enjoyed this poem greatly...hope to see more soon...bye  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-31-2001).] |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
Wow i loved this poem. its great. i can relate to everything you said. it's going to my library It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This is good! Impressive how you formatted it, similarities in the beginning of lines. I thought that was very creative, nice work! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was so sad....but very well written ::hugs:: |
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baby0508 Member
since 2001-05-16
Posts 58Moodus, Connecticut |
i definatly know how you feel..i'm going through this right now and it's not fun at all. i hope things work out for the best. |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
nice job here i hope things work outDont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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