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baby0508
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0 posted 2001-05-31 08:51 AM





I followed all your rules
fell into your little game,
I'd just like to let you know,
that I'll never be the same.

To you, love is just a game,
One that I fell for,
And once you won your game,
"Us" was nevermore.

I still love you, but believe,
That love is so unreal,
because you don't love me back now,
and my heart will never heal.


© Copyright 2001 Heather - All Rights Reserved
stace_co2003
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1 posted 2001-05-31 08:57 AM


awwwww, give it some time hun. you'll be alright. but I like this poem. I'm gonna add it to my library.

Stace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

~*brittt*~
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2 posted 2001-05-31 12:21 PM


Heath- I honestly don't know why you can't just realize you're way too good for him. He doesn't know what he's missing out on, so don't keep giving him what he wants... attention. He's deprived and doesn't deserve any of it.
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3 posted 2001-05-31 12:48 PM


Nicely done here. I enjoyed this poem a lot. Well done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

dramaqueen22086
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4 posted 2001-05-31 12:55 PM


hey this is a sad poem i think every one writes sad poems. anyway, i thought it was really good, but don't worry maybe this guy was a jerk if he didn't like you don't worry he isn't good enough for you. you there are other fish in the sea, he wasn't the right one for you... hey i think i know who this is, im not sure but is it heather, britts sis. if it is why did you guys break up anyways. you were so cute together. well, don't get blue over him   there is someone out there for you that will love you back. good job on the poem and i hope something works out.
   ~!kellie!~

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5 posted 2001-05-31 02:35 PM


Great poem, I really enjoyed the read, No ideas for a title although I suggest you just stick with the first idea that comes into your head.  
Zu

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6 posted 2001-05-31 04:48 PM


sad and hard situation...i enjoyed the read ...but hope things get better for you...bye

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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7 posted 2001-05-31 09:22 PM


short and sweet sista!
i love it
a title could be "Cement truth"
cause its the hard truth of love.
it bites
love can be evil too.  
love is scary!
±Ålyssa±

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8 posted 2001-06-01 12:27 PM


Aww, this is really upsetting... situations like this, that is.  
It's important to realize that you are a valuable person, you don't need reinforcement on that by another person.  If you keep your self esteem up there, you'll pull through.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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