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Ina
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Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2001-05-31 08:45 AM


This poem  was inspired by someone i was talking to last night......thanks......

Let the darkness seep
into the sunlight
vanished vows re-surface
after years of infedelity
A drunk sits alone in his
house regretting all his
choices, wallowing in
self-pity
his children surrond him
looking for love
look into the futur
see that man?
look familiar?
he's that son turned out
just like dad
A young girl full of life
feels the hands of
her father on her body
all through out the years
of most needed love
look at her now on the
street corner
she's dying you know?
killing herself with
drugs and men
I can see a young woman
at the bottom of the ladder
putting up with the groping
hands of her boss
look 5 years from now
she's the CEO and founder
of a new buisness
while that boss is in jail
for fraud
See this young girl who is
writing this poem?
15 years from now  she'll
be writing and working with
great white sharks
Life takes twists and turns
cruel ones and loved ones
but in the end it all works out...

Regina

"Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay
To say these words to you"bon jovi

© Copyright 2001 Regina Levy - All Rights Reserved
Hidden
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since 2001-05-17
Posts 18
Lost in my own world
1 posted 2001-05-31 09:11 AM


I love this poem!!!  It's so good! ...going to my library... Thanks for the read and keep writing. This one really touched me.

**One of the most adventurous things left for us is to go to sleep. For no one can lay a hand on our dreams.**

keoni
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since 2000-10-16
Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC
2 posted 2001-05-31 11:25 AM


Regina-
       You just keep getting better and better. This one is awesome!What a message. I could hear this as a song. I am extremely impressed. Keep this up.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Dopey Dope
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San Juan, Puerto Rico
3 posted 2001-05-31 12:43 PM


The positivity of the outlook in this poem is superb! I surely do hope everything works out!!! I know YOU deserve the best regi *hugs* Great poem!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

dramaqueen22086
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since 2001-05-05
Posts 50
Hadlyme, CT
4 posted 2001-05-31 12:50 PM


hey this poem really mkes you think about life. if you really think deep enough about it, its a sad poem   there are really ppl out there that live like that. i'm just happy i live in a nice house with a loving family that loves me. i would hate to live like that. besides that i thought it was a good poem. kepp up the good work.
   ~!kellie!~

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5 posted 2001-05-31 04:45 PM


great poem...you wrote this one well...i like it a lot...the message was also graet!...thanks for sharing ina ...bye

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Allan Riverwood
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6 posted 2001-06-01 11:54 AM


Sharks?  
Haha... but seriously, I love the quality of your latest work, Regina!  You always write about such fascinating subjects, and your technique is such a compliment to this.
I really like what you did with the concept of "hands" in this poem... very, very nice job on reuse of this word.  
Overall a great poem, but the hands thing is my favourite part.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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