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Hallucination
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0 posted 2001-05-31 07:11 AM


I’m in a world so cold
The rain makes so miserable
I wish I was on a plane to Australia.
Wish I was,
On this totally gorgeous beach
Just laying in the sand.
Don’t wake me yet
if this is just another of my dreams.

Down under is were I wanna be
No matter what you say
I just wanna pack my things and leave
This cloudy day.
Take me under where the sun shines
Where the oceans so beautiful
Take me down under with you.

I’m day dreaming all the time
Down under just sounds so right
I wish it weren’t just an hallucination.
Wish I were,
Watching the sights in Sidney
Feeling the warmth the sun.
I know everything will
Become so true if I just believe.

Down under is were I wanna be
No matter what you say
I just wanna pack my things and leave
This cloudy day.
Take me under where the sun shines
Where the oceans so beautiful
Take me down under with you.

Down Under, down under,
Where everything’s so different.
Down Under, down under,
Is where’s my love is meant,
To stay.

Down under is were I wanna be
No matter what you say
I just wanna pack my things and leave
This cloudy day.
Take me under where the sun shines
Where the oceans so beautiful
Take me down under with you.


© Copyright 2001 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved
Ina
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada
1 posted 2001-05-31 08:56 AM


all i can say is beautiful imagery!!!!!

regina

"Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay
To say these words to you"bon jovi

stace_co2003
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since 2001-03-30
Posts 497
In a dream world
2 posted 2001-05-31 09:17 AM


that is cute, I love the imagery, and i think that Cherish will like this one too.


Stace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797
Limbo
3 posted 2001-05-31 10:05 AM


Hey I will like this one too Stace! I'm an AUSSIE ALSO!!!  

One thing I do have to tell you is that Sydney is spelt with a Y and not an I. Sorry but it is a common mistake that REALLY annoys me.

Apart from that, it's nice poem.  

~AF~

Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved."
-Van Kaam

Dopey Dope
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4 posted 2001-05-31 12:38 PM


This was a nice poem but didn't you hear? Auzzie land is filled with disease and..ugly women....

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymous albert ?
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5 posted 2001-05-31 04:39 PM


LOL@dopey...anyways...this poem was quite beautiful...and the imagery was nice...i liked it...bye

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

cherish
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since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........
6 posted 2001-05-31 09:40 PM


ahhhhhhhh...brian..you can come and stay with me if you like....wait!
*shoves dopes out the window*..he knows he wants to come down here...hehehe..
i loved this poem...can i safely say wheres my mp3???...hahha...good job on this one as usual brian...looking forward to more...btw...it was really impressive..




"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

anonymousfemale
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Limbo
7 posted 2001-05-31 10:16 PM


@Dopey

Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved."
-Van Kaam

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with you
8 posted 2001-05-31 10:33 PM


this is very cute...I'd like to go there myself someday......
Jenn Cirrincione
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9 posted 2001-06-01 09:11 AM


Always wanted to visit there meself...but I'm deathly afraid of snakes!!! Ewwww... and Dopey... your so mean to the Aussies!!! They're our friends!! Wanna start a war or something?!?!  
Nice poem BTW!!

Jenn


"If it's wrong to love you, then my heart just won't let me be right, cause I'm drowned in you, and I won't pull through without you by my side." Mari

[This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 06-01-2001).]

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