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.....?\"Take my Soul away..."[ the 2000th post!!!!! ]

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anonymous albert ?
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sorry, its a quick write...
i should of posted a better poem for my 2000th,  but...

Can you breathe?…can you!…I cant
So let me be!…let me?…continue to die

Cause the past haunts me...
Cause the present kills me...
Cause the future blinds me...

Searching for love…wishing I’ll find this day.
But no one ever understands my heart...
But no one ever acknowledges my soul...

As in hope life will get better…but do I really?
As in hopeless I do live…but am I really?

So what is life?…as sometimes I pray...
that I won’t constantly live in pain...
then go buried in the ground as dust in vain.

But can anyone come and take my soul away...
Is there anyone that truly cares for my soul to stay...
As I carry on not knowing…as I hold on not knowing...

Cause the past haunts me...
Cause the present kills me...
Cause the future blinds me...

And this is what it was…and still is…this is my life.
And this is what it was…and still is…this is my life.


May.31...hope you guys like it and reply...bye



i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-02-2001).]

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aww what a sad poem...but very well written
oh and congrats on the 2000th post thing!
v cool  

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awwwwwww, Albert!! I like this poem. congrats on 2000. I hope you stay for 4000 more.  

Stace

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Well done here.......hello Mr. Elite.
I enjoyed the poem. The ending...perfect.
Yes, this is your life! And this is mine...and that one is hers....and we live with it.
Well done!

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CONGRATULATIONS ON 2000 Albert and a great poem  
Zu
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wow that was actually really cool i like it a lot, nice one al.  Peace

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Congrats on 2000!!!!

I really like this piece... some really deep statements here, my friend. Thought provoking and deep, just what a poem should be   Thanks for sharing.

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Great job on the poem. i could relate to this. congrats on the 2000

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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww alberta!!!......*HUGS*...i love this poem..i can relate 100% to it..you know that..*hugs*....this is going through the printer right now... ...i loved it...
CONGRATS ON THE 2000 ALBERTA!!

muah!




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it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

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Congratulations!!!!
Albertia, you always write these pieces that come straight from your heart and stab me in mine. Quit that already, will you!  
It's a great poem to be your 2000th. Well done on reaching it.


~AF~

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You hit 2000 without warning!     Man, you move fast!
Congrats on elite status!  
You've already made a huge impact on all of us here!
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
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*raises hand*
2000 was last year...
hehe. I'm bad.  
Good job on the 2000th! YAY!!! *has to try to beat that now, hehe*
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hey
lol when i first read this poem i was like "huh?" but then i read it over and actually understood it.  yay for my childlike logic.  congrats on ur 2000th post :-)  
-fear-
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This is incredibly complex.  Your form is really unique and i liked your diction.  As everyone else has reiterated, CONGRATS!!



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I don't know why you don't like this as your 2000th cause I'm very very impressed.  You have done really good, so keep it up.  keep sharing

I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!!

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*sigh* I miss you...

Consider yourself added to the hitlist.

 
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